i sit up stunned
my heart is pounding
it feels like i have just been gunned
the feeling is so astounding.
i look around the room
there is blood on the walls
this may finally be my doom
but what happened i cant recall.
what is this?
laying on the floor
what did i miss?
the body isnt moving anymore.
i yell out to him
but yet he still lays
why are the lights so dim
why is it he who pays?
i look at the lifeless being
my brother,so young
he just got treated like a thing
he never should have come.
my heart is now breaking
for i should have died first
why is he not waking?
for my heart is about to burst.
i tried to keep him safe
but i failed miserably
it was a terrible mistake
now im gonna be very lonely.
there is so much shame
for i brought this upon myself
i am the one to blame
but i couldnt cry out for help.
im in so much pain
i wish this didnt hurt
im alive so why complain?
a rapist,a pervert.
why keep me alive?
and let my brother die
i didnt want to survive
all i can do is cry.
im getting weaker
feeling less pain
the floors are getting sleeker
now i die in vain.
Author notes
my worst night mare would be to lose someone close to me....or die before me....another thing would be to die by getting raped!!
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this was an extremely powerful poem!! I too would hate to lose my brother!! we are very close and it would absolutely kill me.... Nor do i want to die by the hands of a killer!!
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Very Well Writen
it was very hard to decided the winner
but all in all evan though you were all very good
and hope you will enter my next contest comeing soon
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Kepp up the good work
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Really good Piece
This was a realy good and well written piece I could almost feel the pain as I read each line.
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That truly would be awful and I am glad it is only a nightmare's imagination. Well written and you can feel the panic in your words.
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