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her shining star....

shes gazing towards the stary sky
knowing you're up there brings a tear to her eye
she remembers your smiling face
remembering her son, and no one can take his place
she had you for only 2 years
but losing you brought her so many tears
mommy misses you so much
she misses your admiring little touch
the thought of your unique eyes
always catches her by surprise
she was scared when she went home
knowing you made the 'journey' alone
you were strong, you were young
but your life was over before it begun
as the years passed by
she silently asked him why
why did he take her baby boy?
why did he take away her pride and joy?
why did he take him from his place?
and in her heart leave an empty space
all she wants is to see you once more
just a glimpse through the heavenly door
but, she sees you where you are
up above as a shining star


Author notes

"Option One: Make me cry, share a heartbreak with me, or the loss of a loved one. Anything suicide or depressing. Got it?"

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  • I-Am-Custard
    April 17, 2007

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    Sad, a nice concept, but the rhyme was of the over-used, 'easy' variety, and gave the poem that 'been done before' feel... it didn't really do much for the rhythm either, since your syllable counts kept changing. Thank you for entering.


  • Afflicted Affection
    March 22, 2007

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    Wow, so sad...i really like this poem, im sorry if you or anyone had to deal with this. and good luck on the contest.


  • Laura
    March 1, 2007

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    mommy misses you so much
    she misses your admiring little touch
    the thought of your unique eyes
    always catches her by surprise
    she was scared when she went home
    knowing you made the 'journey' alone
    that was amazing you have told this so well. well done, good luck in my contest
    laura xx