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I Believe ...


I Believe ...

 

As I look into the dark space of night

A vastness not likely to be fully comprehended

I wonder ...

Is there more out there then meets the eye

Is there more that I have not experienced

Is there more that I can grasp onto

I consider...

all that which I have already obtained

I can prove their existence

they can be heard

they can be seen

they can be felt

and yet

I ponder...

what if I really have nothing

and everything I have is worthless


What if...

all that I have is diminished by what I have yet to gain

And maybe...

what I have to gain is encompassed in that dark space

that which I can see but not grasp

that which I can feel but not hear

is the answer there

I believe...

Oh, yes I believe ...

that each of us has much to gain

each of us has warmth to feel

love to grasp hold of

If only ...

we dare to believe

in the power

of eternal love


Author notes

I used option 3
I was inspired by the poet: PerVirtuous
http://allpoetry.com/PerVirtuous
titled piece by PerVirtuous: Love Beyond Anything Known
link to the piece used:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2359247


I have no clue why these lines are in this, I even deleted the first one and started all over and still the lines appeared... if anyone has any suggestions please let me know as I wish the lines to be gone.

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  • PerVirtuous
    January 4, 2007
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    Beyond anything expected...

    I love what you have done here! DK just linked me to this. I am so pleased that she did. Many people do not believe in unconditional love, because they have never experienced it. I've never experienced juggling before, but that doesn't mean it doesn't exist!

    • Susan E. Pennycuff
      January 4, 2007

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      I am pleased that you liked my work ( that was inspired by your work) It is always a risky thing to write a new piece based on another's words, and I was not going to enter this contest for that very reason. I never wish to take away from an artist with my own words, but your piece moved me so deeply that it changed my mind and inspired me to attempt this write. I was so worried that should you ever read this piece you would think it did not do your penning justice. I want you to know that I choose your piece because it was a masterpiece in my eyes and one that I think everyone should take the time to read. One that everyone should allow to open thier minds and allow the thorough thought process to enter places not normally visited in ones perspective. Thank you so much for your comment and the respect you have shown while doing so.
      Suzi


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    January 4, 2007

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    Introspective

    This is a very thought provoking penning! Your language use has a nearly evangelical effect, excellent tone and build! Well done poet!
    Good Luck!***
    xxoo
    dk


  • Sgt B
    November 29, 2006

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    Eternal love

    I finally found it too!

    GBY
    Good write here.
    Good luck in the contest,

    ~Ron~


  • Sharcu silver member
    November 29, 2006

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    Beautiful poem, dear friend! Wow! I hope its okay with you that I got rid of all those little lines for you. Loved the poem, though! Nice free verse and a wonderful entry into this contest. Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • ShelleyA gold member
    November 29, 2006
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    An uplifting piece. Good imagery, flow and tone. Very nice expression of feeling. Thought provoking. Good word choice. Excellent closing line. A much enjoyed read. Shelley


  • Ryno
    November 28, 2006

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    I can see you are very religious after peeking on your author's page and can tell from your critique picture. It does seem that much of your inspiration comes from God. I don't know why, just because...

    This is a very encouraging and inspirational and motivational and touching and excellent poem. All at the same time. I like they way you formed it .. like saying the action you are using and then explaining it.

    Great job.

    -Ryan


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    November 28, 2006
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    Thought Provoking

    Wow how odd, the lines I mean. Sounds like the title of a Nancy Drew mystery "The Case of The Phantom Lines" LOL!

    A very powerful voice this piece has, it reflects the inspiration poem very well, while taking it along another path in the maze as well. Good job!
    xxoo
    dk


  • Cupcrazy
    November 28, 2006

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    Wonderful

    A very inspirational piece from start to finish, we all need to believe, and this piece speaks so elequently to that desire. Loved it, excellent writing! Bunny


  • tawk gold member
    November 28, 2006
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    Another wonderful write, you are so talented, you inspire me and so many others here on ap. I believe in love too.
    I know that it is out there it will find you when the time is right. Good luck in the contest

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