Look!
She is listening
to Mother Earth’s voice,
taking a rest on her chest.
Earth is feeding her
with the milk of mystery.
Her heart is beating
with the rhythm of nature,
her blood is slowly whispering
with the rhythm of the breeze
warming her cold shiny skin.
Soon,
new dust of magic will come,
wings ready to fly again
by nature's green sparkles
over the fragile trembling body
for some other story
to be told.
Untied from the past,
ready
to make all our dreams
come true.
Shhhhhhhhhhh...
Don't wake her up.
Walk slow on the tips of your toes,
let transluscence be part of this beauty.
Don't take this dream away
because
all fairy tales are mine again.
In a list
A contest entry
- Faeries by February Moon.
700 points, ended December 24, 2006, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You've used very nice iamges here, images that would really capture a child's attention. This transports the reader to a world of fantasy deep within himself/ herself. Nice write
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This is a very sweet poem, and the words describe the image so well!
"let transluscence be part of this beauty."
Such a beautiful line, it shines like your whole poem does! Well done!
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daydreaming
a dreamy tale, somewhere between a child’s big wondering eyes and an adult’s wishful daydreaming. interesting and original title as well, suitable to the overall mood of the poem. it captivates the careless reader...
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Yes, it is a kind of daydreaming. Dreams are mostly free of charge. Clap with your hands, close your eyes and you are on the starry journey.
~Sonja~
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translucent beauty
lovley pic.
as if something untouchable so as not to sully it.
Enjoyed the slow walking tiptoeing read.
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Thank you very much dragonsear. I am glad that you see it this way.
~Sonja~
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Are you sure English isn't your first language? Wow! This is amazing! I had seen the picture and was inspired, but nothing as creative as this came to mind.... Beautiful job! Its one of those poems you find yourself holding your breath until the end and then when you get there you inhale deeply. Awesome job! Good luck in the contest
--Tim
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No, it isn't...
You are too kind Tim. No, English is not my first language, but who knows, maybe it was in some of my previous lifes, lol. You are lucky because you'v never her me talking. lol...And please do not pay attention if you can see some words in wrong order.
Thank you for your good wishes, it's always appreciated.
~Sonja~
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SUCH BEAUTY
I love to get lost in fairy tale dreams
I actually spend a lot of time there. 
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Hi Kevin, I am glad that you like the world of mystery just don't get lost in any. It good to go there for time to time, but, fairies are everywhere...
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Hello Sonja
I do at times get lost and when I come back the world seems so cold and I deeply wish the worlds beauty would come back one day.
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I think this was a great poem. Your poem almost has a heartbeat itself and the words paint a beautiful picture. I am having a hard to to think of a proper word to describe it- but this just felt-- organic. Pure, delicate and just refreshing. The end is mega-powerful. I just loved this entire piece.
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Thank you dear UnderThereSomewhere (huh, t'was hard to spell it
I am glad that you found my poetry interesting to read it.
~Sonja~
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Wonderful
Wonderful piece Sonja, very imaginative with lovely form and flow and the umagry is just great. Excellent entry Bunny
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Thank you dear Bunny. It loos like my fairy wings are back to me. I am glad you like it
~Sonja~
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This is a truly inspirational poem. You paint the most beautiful of pictures. All I can really say about this is: WOW! Great job, best of luck in my contest.
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Thank you dear Faerytale Princess for this contest and good wishes. That was anew opportunity for my fairy muse to knit a kind of fairy tale mistery. I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~
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Delightful
Hi Sonja. I like your title. A lovely story poem about a fairy and how she receives her wings and magic. Splendidly imaginative. Nice personification of mother earth. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely expression of feeling. Nice alliteration and word choiced. You have a couple of typos, in lines 8 and 10 - rhythm; and your last line - fairy. Other than that, a very entertaining piece and a most enjoyable read. Shelley
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Thanks Shelley. I would like that would be only typos, but, well...thanks for pointing me where they are. Also, your comment is so nice that you make me to blush. Thand you dear friend.
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You're very welcome Sonja. It's a pleasure to read your poetry. Take care. Shelley
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Very beautiful poem and entry Sonja. Much like Croatia’s beautiful lakes and woodlands you and they are a most inspirational.
Jim
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Thanks Jim for your precious comment and time you are ready to spent on my site reading my poetical trials.
~Sonja~
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