Life no longer holds joy for me
Everyday passes without glee
The moments filled with aching sorrow
I hope it will be brighter come morrow
All they see is happiness my sadness i must hide
They don't know how I cry inside
No one shall know the truth hidden away
It is my secret it will not stray
How I wish for true happiness
To be drowned with overwhelming bliss
Life has no meaning at all
They mustn't know I pretend to stand tall
I wish for satisfaction but how
No one can save me now
Author notes
I wrote this poem to describe what depression feels like. Some kids say kids who cut themselves are crazy I think they have a problem. That they feel like life is nothing. Kids who call them crazy are making them feel this way.I know what it feels like to be sad and so does everybody else. But depression is like ten times more than regular sadness. Some people don't understand.
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If that is depresion then I have it to, there is great emotion in htis poem. great write.Best of luck
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good one
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nices piece. rather short for my taste ,but thank you for entering and good luck.
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Very Good... a little disturbing, but it's the cold hard truth.
Well, I like the whole idea of a deppressed persons view. That's one thing I like about this poem. I like how it's true. I like that, you are speaking up for depressed people, and I like that you can use very good descriptive words... HOWEVER... all the rhyming just makes it sound like it was forced rhyming. It sounds as if you are trying to make most of your poetry rhyme, because a lot of people like poetry to rhyme. but this poem is really heartfelt, and it touched my heart because it's true. but then the rhyming flow wasn't well done. I am not trying to be ride AT all, PLEASE don't take this the wrong way, but rhyming isn't always a good thing. you are doing the exact same thing i did when i started writing, you are trying to make every thing rhyme, and some poems were definitely not meant for rhyming. there are a handful of poems that are meant to rhyme, namingly http://allpoetry.com/poem/1594945 but this one doesn't need to rhyme, it's so good. i want to introduce you to freeverse. this are poems that are from the heart, and don't rhyme and are so great and meaningful don't need to rhyme. and PLEASE I BEG OF YOU don't get mad at me for this comment! i just want you to write your poems the best you can, and they don't always have to rhyme. Lynne -
O like the part where you said marrow. I think marrow is a funny ward it was dreat
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I heard it once and I liked the word. Such an entertaining word.
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well done
impressive i love it keep it up
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i like it execpt one part but in ur notes it says you think kids like that have problems i tend to think that everyone deals with difficult issues differently so its unfair to judge them by the way they choose to express their feelins. but whatever floats ur boat
good poem over all!
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I didn't know exactly how to say it but this girl called people who cut themselves crazy. I felt angry and instead of beating her up I decided to write a poem to keep me calm for now.
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