The doors of the mind twist
Disturbs constantly onto - behind bars;
Push or pull to test, need to be applied;
To unlock what is wrong,
The right way is always the best.
Author notes
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Doors are like problems. There are doors that need to be pulled while others need to be pushed. In passing through that problem we need to follow what is right. It it needs to be pulled then pull and if push if push. Coz some people tend to do the other way around making it more difficult to solve...
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- Life Lessons To Be Lived by Veronica Leigh.
450 points, ended December 10, 2006, 8 entries
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I think you have some tense problems within this poem. Also, I know it is a short piece, but it seems very fragmented and does not flow well for me. Feel free to edit. I will reread all of the submissions before judging. Thank you for entering!
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border instructive with this
signal (but not a figurine?),
"Door: Push or Pull" is to have us think with all our might at the possibilism of what is before us.
So toggling with our senses we may not stand at a distance in dissension :
"The doors of the mind twist"
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if we don't stay disordered to be deranged as to what is to be barreling forth :
"Disturbs constantly onto - behind bars;"
we might not find it twice done but two things to be thought.
And thus the unhingement as with actual doors.
It makes me think of two ways to look at weather too ...
It's December but my cheeks have another story through a window that's better than turning on the television about Florida, as my floors are connected to this though the outside grounds are icy from yesterday that is being sunshined away -- and there are magnifications besides emmigrations to the most always!
Another thing I reevaluated was how the hills are like we're all in trays when grasshoppers are kept and seen climbing over saucered edges. It gives it a settly feel as well as not being obstacled from being explorers but with others bowls they even know they slide down.
3:29 is tugging the tagging/ for those interfacing it that way?
3:32 my time to try something else,
Carolyn
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Great! I really like it! It's short and sweet and really clever! You have a very deep thought process with this one. Fantastic job. Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck!
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thank you so much for the comment! good luck in the judging..
ER
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Would you mind putting the number of the saying that you chose?
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thanks for reminding!
ER
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