Riding in on waves of incident
Knowledge and pain hold hands in my maturing heart
Enfolding acceptance and agony into reality
Into a wake of of manipulation
That lulls in the surrounding waters of woman
A sympathetic tsunami that presses me to the glass
Into an awakened cornucopia of sensation
That takes the last three steps to the door
Because I won't be a woman waiting anymore
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Loved it!
"Sympathetic tsunami" - that is just a wonderful turn of phrase. I loved the empowerment at the end, after you acknowledged the grief and hardship, how you make such a positive bold step forward! -
This was just amazing. Very impressive and unique. Great flow
The words portrayed very powerful feelings and I was able to connect on a deeper level..thanks for the read
Knowledge and pain hold hands in my maturing heart....this line was just brilliant and very creative
Great JoB!
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very strong ending...
I enjoyed reading this... nice work
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damm.
wow. I really like the way you spin your words here. the poem feels like the wave ride through womanhood. excellant work. I shall have to take a look at some of your other works sometime.
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Ah, I like this ... very vivid and well-developed imagery. It is beautiful in its simultaneous simplicity and complexity.
As a side note, I must extend an apology for my rather sudden disappearance from the site. I'm reposting most of my poems, and the beginning of a short story that I've been working on during my "invisible" period. Anyways, I just wanted to let you know that I will be back to read your poems (mwahaha!) and to invite your always-appreciated critiques on mine.
Blessings!
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Just wonderful! I love it! I love it! You're one of a kind Lioness, sista!
I hope I'll get back with my work soon. I must confess you truly inspire me!
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lovethe beat and rhythmilove but i thought you were mising probable two line just seemsto fast but i love the ending. Maybbe its the rhyme pattern that made it seem kinda too quick but Isaw many orginal ideas that winked at me.
That lulls in the surrounding waters of woman
A sympathetic tsunami that presses me to the glass
CREATIVE
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This is such a powerful piece! Extremely potent - and so very well penned! You have a certain way with words... I really enjoyed this! Best wishes!
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This was a very good poem. Full of personal feelings blended into it in a manner so that most every girl coming of age can relate. I am impressed, I love to read and I enjoy college books. Still I actually had to look up a word bacause I was unsure of it. All and all, I liked it. Thanks for posting.
Katie
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Wow, you have caught it. Keep it up. Great job. Been there before.
Tabitha:
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I received an impression of standing on your own two feet from this write. Although there are many things that hold women back in this life, we are the only ones who can truly make ourselves whole. Without self contentment what do we have to offer? Bravo.
Tonya
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