who is she
she's the one
dressed in black
away at the back
scared by life and bruised by him
he claims he loves her
that she shouldnt make him mad
its all her fault her brusies are black
she's the one they all call goth
because the black hides all her thoughts
who is he
the one called a fag
thrown out in the cold
by a father who hates
he sits alone in the arms of his love
kicked out by society
left to sit alone
all becuase of his love for a boy
its not any different than a love for a girl
but its looked down on by all who watch
who is she
the one disowned
she loves a girl
and dont care who knows
her mother claims its sin
says its not too late to be save
her father says its a damn disgrace
they dont love her any more
they say her lifes a waste
who is she
the one once a man
for she didnt feel whole
with a life of a man
she's kicked and shes beat
by those in the streets
they dont know her story yet they leave her so weak
they say horrid things they make her say "why
why couldn't I die on the table that night
the night they made me who i am
the woman I am and no longer a man"
who are these people
the ones left behind
the ones the world has left to die
why i ask they are just like us
with a heart and blood
they bleed like us
what makes them so diffrent
from you and I
why must we make them all live a lie
when their just like us
like you and me
what makes you think they shouldnt be
A contest entry
- Controversy by I swashbuckler OK.
470 points, ended July 22, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Not controversial at all, which is what the contest wanted. However, judging you by this poem I doubt you could spell controversy nevermind write it.
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excuse the fuck out of me if you dont like it dont read it, i didnt write it to meet your standards
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How can I not read it if you entered it in my contest you silly little arse faced weasel? And if you didn't write it to meet my standards how stupid are you for entering it in MY contest?
Bugger off.
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I love the way you have exposed the flaws of society (favouring the people suffering). This was very effective, and I hope many more people get to read it
Ampd
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TOUCHING!!!!!!!!
Awww you are very loved by ur gammy & daddy hehe. well i liked this poem...LOTS it is very touching...the very beging with the goth is a good line hunni...but the problem is...it doesnt flow with the idea of been gay or lesbian or havening a sex change...so take that line out & the poem is perfect!!!!!!! love ya jesss ur poem is so meaningful!!!!!!!
xox
luv ya babe
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thanks babe
well i see what you mean but its for an are thing at shcool so the goth thing is in ther to prove a point but i see where ur comeing from,
thankas a bunch luv ya jess
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Simply awesomeness
This is a very deep and awesome poem. Great job!!
Love,
Dad
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Jess,
This very powerful and deep!!!!!! Very insightful for one your age! Baby this is great! There are a few places I think could use a bit of touch up, but not to many or too much!If you want, YIM and I will show you.
Love ya,
Grams
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