cradled in new growth
a single cherry blossom
trembles in the breeze
below the rain has gathered
petals into bright white pools
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nice little pertty write you have here.
i keep saying i must try these some time, but sometime never comes.
and then again here i say thank you for creating this read.
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great poem...short, but great...hope u keep writing and i'll check some more out when i can...
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great!
I have a thing for nature-oriented works. It's wonderful!
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Beautiful Imagery
I could read a few different meanings out of this, everything from the whole circle of life thing, to the different transformations some relationships take from begining to end, all the way to birth and the growing up proccess that every human must take. Gees you always make me look at poems in such a way that poems are never just poems lol Im always looking for the meaning behind them, which is a good thing, it forces me to think outside the box. Luckily your imagery is so beautiful that it makes it fun to learn to do so.
Also this piece leads me through an array of emotions, happiness, sadness, lonilness, and even hope. Great piece Erin
Take care my friend
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flutteringly felt
Zahar (a last name at least to make it more of a community feel for online neighbors?),
"final thought" renders loveely outlooks to be found serial to enduring ones even, as the shivered through winds can show a consequence with sweetness :
"below the rain has gathered
petals into bright white pools"
It reminds me of the provost of prerequisites and perquisite by the verse Isaiah 55:10, 11
"For just as the pouring rain descends, and the snow, from the heavens and does not return to that place, unless it actually saturates the earth and makes it produce and sprout, and seed is actually given to the sower and bread to the eater,
11 so my word that goes forth from my mouth will prove to be. It will not return to me without results, but it will certainly do that in which I have delighted, and it will have certain success in that for which I have sent it."
The forwardness it took me to, but I hope I'm not getting fruitier than what you meant!
So the postulate of almost no exquisiteness, "cradled in new growth" has it's requisite answerable in steaminess of being given answers when it's warmed for our enjoyment through jade of
"a single cherry blossom
trembles in the breeze"
Refreshened to production to be dived into.
tanking your tanka the unfoldings made me one who hummed as the hummingbird to a floret on the border. -
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Thoughtful
I like this. It makes me think of my place that I think of when I am upset. I think of fields of these trees and it comforts me. Then I re-read it and I think that single cherry blossom must be lonely and I feel sad. What a way you have to bring about such emotion in your writing. I love that you do that to me
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applause
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eh.. so so... not sure what i didnt like about it. but it was not bad
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this is pretty and light, i will give you an honest opinion, i think you suit longer writes more, this is pleasant, just felt somewhat empty, feels like there should be some more to it, seems like its only just begun then it comes to a jerky halt, just my thoughts though....
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ah well, tankas are that way. but if the jerky halt leaves you feeling kind of reflective, then i'd say the tanka did it's deed.
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Niceness!
You and nature are like fuzzy chums having one last beer before you die for something you both really believe in...that is why I call this "niceness"!
KAY
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sweet and short:
I like this one..................because I visualize it, and it is short. Most usually I hate short poems; but yours are not bad. They dont ramble. So in turn I will comment 2. It was beautiful.................post forever!
LOVAIM
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nice one
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