What a beautiful web you weave.
Spun by lies and jealousy
Laced with pain and empathy
Hunting only the gullible
Innocent to such lust
Reassurance is needed to gain their trust
Luring them into your beautiful trap
Drawn in by a silver illusion
Ignorant to the silken string
Mesmerized by possibilities
Believing your promises of sweet desire
Unaware of their fate
Thriving on their fears
Trembling, at first they struggle
Biting, tasting, holding their frail soul in your hands
Seducing them with such promiscuity
Wrapping them up tight
Casually you’ll suck out their life
Author notes
my favortie poem. i think it's the best one i have ever written
A contest entry
- Anything by HerbalGoat.
456 points, ended May 24, 2007, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think it's about?
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I agree, it's the best poem I've read about this topic. Excellent writing, and the first stanza was awesome.
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Very well done!! Spiders really don't bother me and it takes a lot to creep me out :)
Though you got your point across very well, and the imagery in this is good! I think overall you did excellent!
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I have not had the chance to read any other works of yours (or rather I am assuming that I have not) but when the contest is over and you are revealed, I will have to stop by some time. I find this piece very nontradititional, in the sense of theme and concept, but it is very intricate in the wording, feel, mood, etc.
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thank you. intricate is my stlye. i like detailed...plus i like to weacve an underlying pattern into my poetry. <3
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Please continue
I love how you work slowly into the climax. I couldnt read it fast I had to read it in the mood. I read it word by word and just sucked it in and i will ever hold it close to me. I wont ever be able to let it go. I must congradulate you, for nobody has been able to do that. Thank You!
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EEEEKKKK...cannot stand spiders...gave me the willies as i read....imagined one crawling on me..You pulled this off quite well with the flowing verse...
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I really like your word choice here. The way you write is really unique. Your poetry flows and rhymes and yet somehow still stands out from a million others
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i like it... but im scared to death of spiders!!!
this seem excatly the description of how spider eat you or some other way of life!!!
i am aracnofobic (if that is how it is spelled), it is not just a fear thoug...
anyway, it is a great piece, and the way you used your words to describe this "ritual" is pritty cool!!!
i still think you have a lot of potential!!!
keep writing like this!! (maybe try not to write bout spiders, hahahaha, just joking)
kisses and good luck!!!
"Do Magic"
just me...
(* pau
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... te amO principitO
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cool...
i like it... but im scared to death of spiders!!!
this seem excatly the description of how spider eat you or some other way of life!!!
i am aracnofobic (if that is how it is spelled), it is not just a fear thoug...
anyway, it is a great piece, and the way you used your words to describe this "ritual" is pritty cool!!!
i still think you have a lot of potential!!!
keep writing like this!! (maybe try not to write bout spiders, hahahaha, just joking)
kisses and good luck!!!
"Do Magic"
just me...
(* pau
^^
... te amO principitO
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wow i totally agree with you, this poem is amazing. i really dont know how to explain how much i like this with words, but honestly, its awesome. keep up the good work. =] great write.
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This is really good.. I loved every line..It just said what it had to say. Great job.
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nice
I really like this. not only did you really hit hard are true human motives you hit on Shakespeare's idea from Macbeth of "fair is fowl and fowl is fair." That which seems to be to good to be true is just that... false. And it is that which we believe to be "fowl" that is truly the fairest of things. In what ever way you wish to see it. Very good.
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wow.
this poem - my gosh! i really related to the way you wrote this, and then i had to read it again and it was even better. i love the title and the first line, and how that has the only period in the whole poem. "drawn in by silver illusion/ignorant to the silken string" "seducing them with such promiscuity" - beautiful. thank you thank you -
I love this. Absolutely amazing!! One of the best i've read! You did a fantastic job!!
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This poem is awesome!!! It flows really well and the words you've used all seem to just fall into place...The imagery projected is really amazing and i love your use of metaphors..very clever My favourite part was probably:
"What a beautiful web you weave.
Spun by lies and jealousy
Laced with pain and empathy
Hunting only the gullible
Innocent to such lust
Reassurance is needed to gain their trust
Luring them into your beautiful trap
Drawn in by a silver illusion
Ignorant to the silken string
Mesmerized by possibilities
Believing your promises of sweet desire
Unaware of their fate
Thriving on their fears
Trembling, at first they struggle
Biting, tasting, holding their frail soul in your hands
Seducing them with such promiscuity
Wrapping them up tight
Casually you’ll suck out their life"
lol i can't wait to read more of your work, you really have some sick skills 
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Thriving on their fears
Trembling, at first they struggle
Biting, tasting, holding their frail soul in your hands
Seducing them with such promiscuity
Wrapping them up tight
Casually you’ll suck out their life
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I like this!
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wow....
I think you were wrong about me being talented at all......especially after reading this one. I will definately go read the rest....even though I may not leave a comment on them all! I love the flow and feel of this. you truly do have alot of talent.
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<3
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awesome
This is awesome. I love this poem, it rocks. An amazing poem. -
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thanks i was hoping others would like it as much as i do, and i normally hate me work.
<3
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