The intensity of our loving
is centred in the cosmic movement of our loins
as we ride each other
Moving in tandem we fall into a hypnotic rhythm
Rubbing up on each other
The sight of your lovely wet sex
Making me stroke harder inside you
You reach one hand behind you
Stroking my balls
Feeling the heat from my balls on your fingers
The sweet warnth of your internal juices
Plays a gentle orchestra of slick wet sounds
To my insistent thrusting and pumping
I gaze down, looking at myself moving within you
Taking in the panoramic vista
Of your angel cake and beautiful ass
Still not quite believing that you have bestowed such an honour upon me
The mere thought of what you’re letting me do
is almost overwhelming
It almost makes me cry with sheer disbelief and ecstasy
at the realisation that I’m, at that very moment,
in you…
I feel my meat stick flexing against your inner walls
As if I can taste you with my cock
A conoisseur of the heavenly scent of your honey
As it drips out of its warm abode within you
A sheen of wetness
Glistening on your vulva
Dribbles incessantly, all over my shaft
Rivulets of your wetness running down my balls
and onto my thighs
I reach a finger down
Marinading it in the delicious juices
Streaming out of you
Some of the juice accidentally spilling across other fingers
Which I then proceed to suck with delight…..
mmmmmmm…….yummy….
All the while I’m steadily
Pumping into you
Thrusting deeper with each expansive stroke
Of my yearning cock
Which your pussy gobbles up hungrily
You’re bucking against me
Your sweet ass cheeks
Slapping against my pelvis
I bend forward
Reaching under you to cup your breasts
Stroking, massaging them
While riding you
I lightly slap your ass cheeks
Kneading them with my hands
My cock moving
In time to your moaning
By now our pace is frantic
We’ve lost control
Our bodies moving of their
Own volition
We are just witness as our bodies ride
Together in unison
Feeling the blood rushing to our heads
You moan and whimper,
Pleading with your orgasm
Its strumming around the edges
Threatening to overwhelm you
But not quite hitting
Your eyes closed
You feel me everywhere within you
And then! A spark!
A mini explosion between your thighs
Coloured lights behind closed eyes
Its taken over you
You’re incoherent
The orgasm washing over you in waves
A crescendo of intense bliss
with its locus concentrated between your thighs
Spreading throughout your body
In that instant
My balls tighten and involuntarily
I start squirting my load into you
You can feel my hot cum
Plastering your inner walls
My cock hammers away at you
There’s nothing I can do about it
Your wetness mixing, mingling
With my cum
You whole body is shuddering
Our breathing is ragged
You flop down on the bed
I follow you down
We lie in a dishevelled heap
I’m still in you
You’re flexing your pelvic floor muscles
Squeezing my cock
I gasp each time you do that
Afterwards we lie tangled together
Enveloped in a haze of deep dreamy bliss…
A contest entry
- Deliciously Wet Delightfully Wicked by Sensual Sapphire.
650 points, ended May 22, 2007, 11 entries
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400 points, ended June 20, 2007, 19 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i would like to thank you so very much for this fine entry into my contest for david. it is truly appreciated more than you can possibly know. am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Lengthy and strong. this is a good piece. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Nice write. This is what I was looking for!! LOL
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Hi gorgeous
thanks for reading and commenting my poem, glad to be in your contest.
Previn
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The intensity connect this
with it predacessor a feat that is not always so easy to do. There are bit of this however that should be looked over for there technical aspects as well as for their actual meaning (ie panoramic vista)Being such an uppity snot when it come to matters like this I was distracted enough that I couldn't concentrate on more than the piece as a whole. It's good but it needs some fine tuning to make it great. -
I already commented this write but to read it again reminds me of having sex with my man! It's like you were peaking in my window! lol
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wowwwwwwwwwwww
This is like whoa!!!!!! I think I just creamed myself
I would like to read more and chat soon! 
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Glad you enjoyed it milady.
I have a few other poems on making love that you can check out.
I will post more when I write.
You creamed yourself? Mmmmmm, sweet...
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Even though it's a bit more graphic than I like it expresses those raw emotions very well. I earnestly believe love making is so much more than mere body contact. It should be a connection of two souls. Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Leo Long
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Very visual. Imagery clear. There is no mistaking this erotic piece. You place the reader there. My favorite line was the ending. Brought a soft ending to this well written write. Well done. Dawn
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nothing like a lil porno first thing in the morning
Hey now ... this was certainly vivid. You have a great eye for detail and have obviously been paying close attention during sex. LOL. You leave us in no doubt about what the Voice in the poem saw, felt, heard, smelled, tasted, thought ... but because it leaves so little to the imagination, it reads more like porn than poetry. Just my opinion. Hated "meat stick" by the way. Just as an experiment, you might want to try taking out all the graphic phrases, keeping all the suggestive ones, and see what kind of poem you have. -
(here follows the simple opinion of one writer these views are not neccesarily embraced by the poetic society)
Ok so its not exactly poetry, I would say its a fantastic story and you have some great discription going on but in my opinion if you actually boiled it down to a poem it would less tell you exactly what parts are being used and what is happening and more just allude to whats happening still lacing it with the strong driving emotions but cutting out words like "cock, pussy, cum, vulva, shaft.. etc. etc." I am not saying they aren't usefull but I just think this falls more under the category of "Erotic Story" I like reading those to though so its a win win lol anyways seems you have some lovely emotions to pull your writing from so keep writing
~kar
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very open...but I had lots of imagery, good ones that is... wasn't really expecting what I read hear, but thats not a bad thing, i like being thrown off.. good write
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WOOO MOMMA! (Breathing Hard)
Ok well i was going to enter this thing yet, dayum read this left me woohoo. nvmd lol anyhow this was well penned full of emotion, sexual heat and passion. Great descriptive volcabulary that totally takes a person to the point you are. Picturing the whole things as if happening before you. Damn good job. Im backing away from this contest YOU ROCK MAN! nop pun intended
Vsutton
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Good write (blushing)
This poem has a good rhythm (no pun intended) and should make the coldest person (male or female) feeling a stirring in their loins.
A bit graphic for me regarding some of the words chosen, however it is fitting and not vulgar.
The title is well chosen too, giving an idea and thus wetting the curiosity (again.. no pun intended).
Good luck and well done.
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this is a poem of such pure shit, that you need to die in house fire
what the hell is wrong with you? have you ever taken a class on writing?
i am angry that i actually read this piece of shit.
never write poetry again!!!
by the way
"You reach one hand behind you
Stroking my balls
Feeling the heat from my balls on your fingers"
is so poorly written, i cry.
and she would reach under herself to grab your balls.
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Mind Blowing
I am speechless, you have left me wanting more. I find this to be beautifully erotic and so descriptive I can almost smell and taste the experience. Wonderful write Previn, good luck in the contest...Sue
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