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Indigo Nightmares

 

 

 




Crippled by psychological brigades

Self awareness fades to a beastly tune

Kept hypnotized by the indigo shade

Bound and gagged in a jaded cocoon

 

Plummeting out of control, beyond reach

Silent screams echo in blinding despair

Sacrifice certain with a mental breach

Self torn consciousness; unable to repair

 

Internal messaging placed on ignore

Tainted images flood my psychic well

Subliminal battles; bruised to the core

Frozen in a nightmare inflicted hell

 

Clawing at invisible foundations

Fighting for release of this damnation


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Title.......Indigo Nightmares


Word Bank.....sacrifice....jaded....frozen.....repair

......blinding........control......hypnotized......ignore


Form.....English Sonnett with a rhyme scheme of abab, cdcd,
efef and gg


To be written as a Darkwrite without any form of the words.....dark, scare, fright or alone



There's your challenge lil bro..........hope you enjoy it

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 28, 2006

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    "Kept hypnotized by the indigo shade Bound and gagged in a jaded cocoon" {salutes ya...with BOTH hands...} Wanda


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 28, 2006
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    Ms.Bel,
    I don't think there's anything you CAN'T do! This was an awesome piece, gf!
    Brilliantly written!
    I think you went above and beyond the call of the challenge


  • lavender shadows
    November 27, 2006

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    I have a thing for indigo... amonst many other things.

    Wow, that is quite the challenge! And you definitely succeeded. In counting, I got the same number of syllables as Lee in lines 4 (9) and 8 (11). But other than that, you really did do an awesome job for your first sonnet. I won't suggest that you do more - because I hate doing them myself - but you've really done a fantastic job with the challenge!


  • leander Moderators member
    November 27, 2006

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    *grabs his chin from the floor*

    ooh, what a lovely sonnet you have written here my sweety On first sight, it looks very muchos like a sonnet indeed, you did marvellous with the rhymes, you did wonderful with the stanzas and the cadance in this one

    I noticed all the lines are 10 syllables, except last from first stanza (9) and last from second stanza (11)
    I'll have to dig deeper into the theory of sonnet though, but whatever, sonnet or not, it's simply beautiful


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    November 27, 2006

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    Brilliant!

    Well Sis, what can I say....you have taken my challenge and come through with a magnificent write that I feel is not only dark but has a sence of lonelyness to it. Brilliant write, and I am honored that my challenge to you inspired you so.


    lil Bro


  • Malabu
    November 27, 2006

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    Emotion and darkness

    ummmm My Sultry Moon........I hope you do not care to write in this style more often.......Ha ha.....sultry is better.......and although you have done a fine job with this bank of words.......ravishing the dark side.....to me....is better left to others.....I want the silk of your words and the soft satin of your heart to tempt receptive hearts of love you so exquisitly present...love what you have done here though.....
    Mally


  • Blazing White Wolf
    November 27, 2006

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    excellent!

    well My liooness you did so well with this sonnett I have not a clue why you would not write more beautiful pieces in this style for it fit you well
    love,
    Master

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