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Hollow

Confusion haunts the best of me
Knowing the end before it begins...

My soul you touched,
The deepest part of me.

Blinded, watching as you sleep,
Saddness fills my heart, knowing what must happen

Built a wall so high,
Begins to crumble, this cannot be.

A hollow heart softly speaks,
Goodbye my friend....

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Well...I don't have too much to say except you want something so bad, but you know it's not going to last, yet you go ahead and dream for a while. Hmmm...hope that makes sense...and ill re-write this better later. Thanks to those who read it!

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  • Deke
    January 16, 2008

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    You go girl; you were on a roll when you wrote this one. I bet we have all been here at one time or another. Just go back and delete that extra d out of sadness and it will be perfect.
    Damon

  • Bob Fox
    January 12, 2008
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    A friend

    That very special person that we love & trust. Never must we forget. Your words touch my heart


  • Rilly
    February 7, 2007

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    i know exactly how that feels.
    i feel like that every time sadly.
    wonderful write and great description of the sadness and pain.

    rilly

  • cocoaprincess05
    January 11, 2007
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    wow

    i really love this. you can feel the sadness in your voice.
    "My soul you touched,
    The deepest part of me."
    ^ my favorite.

    i like it the way it is, but would love to see how you would want to change it.


  • birdoffire
    December 13, 2006

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    "Confusion haunts the best of me, Knowing the end before it begins..." I know EXACTLY whats that's like. I feel the same way right now actually..dreaming of something you know wouldn't last. That's why I liked this, it's relatable to me and that's hard to find in anybodies writing nowadays. Good job

  • Just4u
    December 4, 2006

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    The point of the relationship road where it meets a fork...separating. We wish to maintain the side by side of the original road we traveled together, but now we must each go our separate way. With each step more distance, but only "physically" for the mind knows not of space confinments and so we will continue to carry the other within us always...

    This line "Knowing the end before it begins..."
    brings to mind the Bible saying...
    "What I have feared the most has come upon me".

    Sometimes we even self sabotage ourselves through fear of losing. We hold on TOO tight and the other person takes it as a stranglehold and they feel smothered so to speak and so back off bring about the very thing we were trying to avoid in the first place. But with every meeting comes growth and that is what it's all about in the end anyway...

    Hugs and Happy Holidays

    -Eddy


  • Energizer Bunny
    November 27, 2006

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    ~~"Well...I don't have too much to say except you want something so bad, but you know it's not going to last, yet you go ahead and dream for a while."~~

    I know exactly how you feel. I'm there right now! Sure, different situation, but same feelings.

    Nice write girl . Even though it's sort of sad I get more of a frustrated feelings when reading it. Maybe not too all, but to me, frustration can difficult to deal with at times. I like the way you speak about confusion haunting you then end with a hollow heart. Nice touch.

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