Listen, Lover, let me linger
Longer in this lovely Lie
Where our Words will only will us
Twisted Truth and Tempting Times
Even eyes indulge in Evil
Pretty promises pour forth
Soft, sly smiles seducing Reason
Dark Desires behind locked doors
My Mind mingles with my Madness
Carefully cherishing our Kiss
Fantasy? Perhaps, but we
Never knew anything but this.
Author notes
I was experimenting with...well, something. Did it work? Who knows.
if you could be an ice-cream flavour, what would you be?
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Exemplifying and Heartfelt
words that leaves an open door to ones imagery. You do write the free verse form well, with some colorful metaphors. Excellent piece of work....ennovy
Keep them coming!
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Excellent !
Well writen! A very poetic ring both in sentiment and lyric; almost XVIIIth century!
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Great...I was swept up into your story as I read along. I liked the fact that capitalized certain words along the way allowing for their importance to be emphasixed...great work...Thanks for stumbling across my path! peace and light always, Kendal
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Yes it does work; I like it. Now in order to get points I have to pad this out to 100 characters, right? How many characters have I got so far?
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Tasteful. The alliteration worked amazingly in the first half. Then after that, it felt like it started to loose it some.
*applauds*
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this is great
It has a hint of mystery. I really do like it, especially the first stanza.
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