More than seven years
of bad luck, have
come and gone
yet you have not
shattered.
You are my friend, yet
sometimes my enemy.
You see me as I am,
well-mapped and
ravaged by time
gradually
changing shape, deep creases
accentuating imperfections,
features more prominent
jowls less elastic.
patchy eyebrows and thinning
lips of palest rose-hue,
naked today, without the paint
that so appeals.
You do not judge me
nor lie to me
You show me as I am.
Author notes
It's not so bad, if I hold it further away! A case for botox I fear.
A contest entry
- Mirrors by Nereida Nightshade.
404 points, ended December 12, 2006, 72 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - No Title: Just Come Have a Look by I-Am-Custard.
900 points, ended July 5, 2007, 41 entries
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More than seven years
of bad luck, have
come and gone
yet you have not
shattered.
The detail in this is different
its wonderful
great job
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Oh this is a terrific write! nice job!
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This is great! Youve captured the essence of time perfectly, but its not all bad is it?
Good Luck in the comp
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I like this, it's well formed and has a nice rhythm established with the punctuation you used... I would have liked some more personal touches though, to endear me to the speaker.
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very cute
oh this is so cute. I really like the way you see things in life. You sound like you have a wonderful personality and it shows in your writing. In my case I turn out the lights, squint my eyes and tip head sideways. Don't look so bad after all!!! who needs botox? lol, great write with this one.
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Thanks for reading and leaving such nice comments.
Only joking about the botox, couldn't afford it and hate injections!!
Ann
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Wow that brings aging into a whole new light. The poem had a really good pace to it and the words just floated off the page. I really like it. Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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fantasic write!
yes my friend we all change with time but all those lines and creases ect that we get are a map of our lives , there written on our skin for all to read,how beautifull every line that shows we have cried,laughed loved and been loved,those *tubby* bits or little *well rounded* bits that have known childrens hugs tugs and squeezes ,revel in that image for there shows life
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Thank you so much for reading, honey and your lovely comments and applause. Yes, my grandson loves his cuddly granny!!
Ann
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Once again I have enjoyed reading your work, I like the flow the words and the idea of the mirror being an old companion you can converse with and knows you so well. very nice write and such a clever idea. Doomday.
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A great write and true to life. I find it helps if I don`t put the bathroom light on.
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Thanks for reading this. I find I look even more ghoulish with the light off!!
Ann
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Excellent
I to am see the changes in the mirror, My best mirror is the expression on a womens face, Sometimes it is pleasure other times disconcern, I think you have inpired me. I like your picture, If the mirror see that I think it is mostly pleased
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Expressive
An Ode To A Mirror. I like it! This is funny, too. "my friend, yet sometimes my enemy" ain't it the truth? Sometimes I wish the darned things had never been invented (especially since I passed 40
) Best wishes in the competition.
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem, it's appreciated.
Ann
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Ditto!!
Oh, dearie me ~ the mirror, friend and foe! I like those ones you find in fairgrounds the best. You know the kind I mean ~ they slim you down to practically nothing! I've been combing the department stores to see if I could buy one...but no luck yet 
. Still, as you said, it's better if you hold the mirror away ~ or better yet, don't put your specs on! Lol...
You've done a great job here ~ I love the ruminative feel to your words. You give the reader a keyhole view into your private thoughts as you converse with your mirror. Something we can all relate to.
Quite lovely. Best of luck in the contest, Ann.
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I don't suppose I'm that bad for nearly 65 and I did exaggerate slightly! I laughed at your reference to fairground mirrors, as I always look slimmer in dept.store mirrors, but when I try the same garments on again at home, they never look as good! Glad you enjoyed reading it.
Ann
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Hi Ann. A very nice write. Good imagery, flow and tone. Very nice expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives and very good word choice. I like how you personify the mirror and converse with it. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley
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Thank you for reading, Shelley. It's not my usual style, but I like the challenge of a different form, though rhyme is my favourite. Thank you for your encouraging comments.
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You're very welcome Ann. It's a pleasure to read your poetry. Take care. Shelley
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