The first time that we met-
he was on his front door step;
the poor boy had a bandage on his knee.
Though small, he stood tall-
with his spirit and his heart;
and he shone like a bright, shining star.
I remember the time-
we were upstairs in his room;
drunk (courtesy of his old mans' home brew).
Lying on the floor-
just playing dodgy eighties tunes;
(Kylie & Jason's, "Especially for you").
We staggered up the street-
scrounging fags from those we'd meet;
smoking on the town hall steps not yet sixteen.
He liked to sing and dance-
play bass guitar and tambourine;
and he wore a smile that lit up every room.
Yes he lived his life for love-
and loved his time upon this earth;
but his head was turned when heaven's beauty called.
He'll be up there teaching angels-
tunes to play upon their harp;
and I bet they love the music that he brings.
But our friend he still exists-
he lives forever in our hearts;
'cos he shone like a bright shining star.
He shone like a bright shining star.
Author notes
BARNEY, anything friendship/ broken friendship.
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I knew that this poem had to be about Barney - it was so much like the strains of the one which I just read and commented on ... and so utterly heartbreaking once again -
Again, you completely brought him alive; so many vibrant images and memories in this, you did a wonderful job with it!
Favourite part had to be,
"but his head was turned when heaven's beauty called."
What a BEAUTIFUL way of referring to death,a nd losing someone - seriously that is just amazingly inspiring....
He was lucky to have called you a friend, I feel, by these words you write for him
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Danielle was my star. Thank you!!!
Mylee -
Beautiful poem
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he appears to be a shining star in your life. and tthis poem as well is a shinging star
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this was great
i feel his presence.....beautiful sentiment...best of luck -
Yes, Lennon did.
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oh i love this! very emotional! great job! i wish you good luck in my contest and thank you for entering!
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This was a nice poem, but you didn't read the directions.
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heart felt story.....
Wow, a beautiful story, artfully written....ttfn
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wonderful
This is a great write for your friend. It's memories like these that keep them alive. Thank you for sharing this very heartfelt poem with me and good luck in the contest
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Beautifully writtin. Im sorry for your loss. Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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Oh this is sounds so sad and yet just so happy. Just well done great job! thanks for entering!
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This was wonderful
a loss of someone so special
I'm sorry
I liked this saong..it took me places
Lovely write
good luck in my contest
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This poem was amazing, I hope for your sake and the person that you have writen about, that this is not true, losing a friend is the hardest thing anyone can do. Sometimes a poem can make you feel happy, sometimes it'll make you feel sad, but for me, this poem did both, which is an amzing quality!
Goodluck in the contest.
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This was a great write, and thank you for entering my contest.
I love the way you compare your friend to a bright, shining star...I'm sure he was
I love these lines,
'He'll be up there teaching angels-
tunes to play upon their harp;
and I bet they love the music that he brings.'
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Very nice sounds like someone you realy cared for in the days of yore
Thank you for entering the contest
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Honestly, I didn't really like this poem too much. I understood the meaning and what happened but I didn't like the way you wrote this.
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this poem really makes you think of whats important in your own life!
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I do like this and it is very full of emotion. It made me feel and it made me think. Two of my Favs when reading poetry
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that was really good. loved it. thanx for entering && good luck
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very nice. I like it even better now that I've read it twice. I really like this lol. great write! thanks for the entry.
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This is a beautiful tribute, I love the form you chose, you've done an excellent job with it. The emotions run so deep in this wonderful piece. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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This is both heartwarming and sad. I'm glad you have such warm memories of your friend. It sounds like you had a very special friendship, one that goes beyond the grave.
Thank you for entering this beautiful piece and I wish you good luck in the contest
ramblin
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Finding the blessing in disguise in every drop of sadness, that is a philosophy and a poetic theme that I admire. Lots of emotion, great expression, a loving remembrance. Thanks for entering.
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that was amazing and i am sorry for your loss....you are an amazing writer but now exactly wha ti was looking for but good luck in your other contests...
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A wonderful tribute and perfectly shows your admiration and love expressed with a nice gentle flow that is both peaceful and pleasing regardless of the outcome ... A shining star indeed.
Bazza
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wonderfully written. I really like this poem and how it flowed. Great write. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. kassie -
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He's up there teaching angels-
tunes to play upon their harp;
and i'll bet they love the music that he brings.
But our friend he still exists-
he lives forever in our hearts;
'cos he shone like a bright shining star.
love it
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the title itself sent me dazzling , needless to say about the poem !! i just don't believe such GREAT poems too can be written !!
"Though small, he stood tall-
with his spirit and his heart;
and he shone like a bright, shining star."
these are words i shall remeber throught my life !!
thank you so much for entering and best wishes in th contest ,
your well wisher ,
-truthwriter-
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Wow. this made me smile and it brought a tear to my eye. very very nice. Ususally I put a tiny detail I didn't like in here when I'm judging but I can't find one. THis is .... amazing. THe "home" feel and the emotion blend so well. THe memories are heartfelt and easy. THANK YOU for the GREAT entry.
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Oooh... this is lovely, and sad at the same time... An interesting and enjoyable write.
lol, looks like I don't have a big winning chance in this truthwriter's contest!
Good luck!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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It's happy, but sad at the same time. It has a tone that I think his music might have. It all came together nicely. Thanks for entering.
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it sounds like you were the closest of friends. great rite and good luck in my contest!
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A wonderful tribute to such a wonderful friend. I am so sorry for your loss. Excellent write so full of emotions. Good luck in my contest
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I like the positive attitude you have when you look upon this friend of yours. You look at him and see him for what he was, and you cherish exactly that.
A great tribute, and a powerful ending. I like the way you picture him teaching tunes to angels, a powerful metaphor
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Cool write and memories of your friend. Happy and Sad all rolled into one Thank you for entry and lots of luck in the contest!
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Great poem. The words flows nicely in the poem. Keep up the good work. Sorry it took so long to comment, we had some problems at home..neways love the poem good luck in the contest.
~Krehei~
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nice job
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Good, Good Luck!
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How cute
I really liked the beginning of your poem... Where he showed up with a bandage on his knee. That was just really cute.... Great poem/song. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie. -
This poem really brought a sense of happiness and peace to me although it should actually probably be a sad poem. I think it's just about fond memories and holding someone who moved on to the next life in high esteem. Thanks man.
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thanks a lot for your kind words,
cheers,
floorboards.
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awesome
I SO ENJOYED THIS WRITE. IT TOOK ME BACK TO MY PRECIOUS TEENAGE YEARS. THOSE WERE THE GOOD OLE DAYS FOR ME. I LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE DONE WITH THIS PIECE. A WONDERFUL POETIC PENNING. YOU HAVEDONE A GRAND JOB WITH THIS ONE!
KEEP ON PENNING!
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Excellent
What a wonderfully touching story, this was beautifully written, loved the form and flow and the emotions that just reach out and grab you! Excellent write. Bunny
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thanks a lot for your great comment,
much appreciated,
floorboards.
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Touching
What a lovely tribute you have written here. -
I enjoyed the story very much so. It seems this "shining star" was a bit of a rebel, yet there was something good inside. Meaningful no doubt. Again a simple but enjoyable poem. Keep on penning.
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good te hear thaim memoires fb, lets git it put te music next weekend. fingers (purchase). -
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heehee, cheers fingers
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nice
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I love the sense of happiness. A relief from all the gloom. I love the imagry put into this. All aroung good job.
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Excellent
A wonderful tribute to a friend, You have open up your heart and that allways results in a great write, I am glad I took the time to read this. Write on Poet
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wonderful and true 'boards. that shining star has now gone supernova. there's a new constellation in the sky.... the owl.
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I know of angels too.
Darling
My two best friends
died and one suicided
both loved life and
in me deeply confided.
Even though its nuts
we talk also now
as I'm in ruts
they advise me how.
Their voices don't speak
but throw a light
as my words tweak
which way is right.
So, relish your memories
and relive past joys
to dispel today's sadness
with your angel's noise.
Smoosh
Janet
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A Gem
I really like this one, the tone and the movement when you hear yourself read it, very enjoyable and comforting, a great tribute, leaves a smile.
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fantastic!
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Wonderful tribute
What a wondeful tribute to a friend has who has moved to a better existence, it shows just how special he was in the fact that you wrote this about him and for him, I am sure that he is in the Arms of the lord enjoying the beuty and the music, wondeful poem very touching to my heart
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Very loving, touching, and beautiful piece! I have a friend in Heaven that I'm sure your friend will enjoy!
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Nice Work
You write well of your friend. Your verses flow well with an americana scenery. Nice repetition of the titel line, "He shone just like a bright, shining star."
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thanks a lot,
cheers,
floorboards.
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excellent !!!!
this is a beautiful poem for someone you cared so deeply about.i belive if you remember your loved ones each day a little part of them stays with you memories can never fade if you keep them alive.wonderful poem, three thumbs uo !!!
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Touching and well written
I really like your layout of your poem. It seems to flow very nicely.
Words are often the hardest but best way to express how we feel....
It was beautiful. Keep writing!
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beautifully sad
I'm not sure I like the wording of "He shone just like a bright, shining star" it doesnt flow well. The rest of the poem, however, told a wonderful story. I can imagine myself doing just the same things. It brings good imagery.
Keep dreaming in ink,
Jessica
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ahhh
this poem is soooo sweet. i like the second verse best because its so nice, for want of a better word! you obviously love this person very much!
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Beautiful!
Its sad, true and overwhelming, I was upset today, needed to cry, couldn't, your poem provided the relief! Thank you! -
Oh! that's sad...but sweet
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Alex, this is a stunning recollection of a memory of your youth and a frienship that you shared. A beautifully touching piece that flows with a lovely rhythm. Well done dear poet.
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Hugggs you all up. A wonderful tribute my friend. Great job. Jan
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excellent piece, nicely written with great wording. My favorite line was Yes he lived his life for love-
and loved his time upon this earth;
but his head was turned when heavens' beauty called. rememnde dme of someone i knew. great work!
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A FINE TRIBUTE TO A FINE MATE, BROTHER!
Reminds me of me younger days here in the states playing the bass in a band of friends and getting the older fellows to buy us bear and smokes (which is what we call them here - fags means another thing entirely in the USofA but we won't go there). I can see him in Heaven playing the tamborine and bass with me mates JOHN & GEORGE smiling down at you like a LITTLE STAR after seeing this fine piece for him. Thanks SO MUCH for featuring, Mr. Floorboards for otherwise I would have sadly missed this beautiful piece today! I just wrote a piece called LITTLE STAR about an hour, ago - for my SAIL AWAY book which is why the title of this one REALLY CAUGHT my attention while I was taking a break from putting the first half of my 18th book together. Take a look at LITTLE STAR when you can and you'll see what your friend has become and what he is up to!
God Bless Him and you for the gift of love and friendship which is something that them damn creditcards cannot buy no matter how much they try to say so in their ads taht we are paying such high interest rates for!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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oh my dear brother, thank you very much indeed for your kind words, been rather busy lately, not been on much, i'll check little star out soon my friend,
stay cool,
mr floorboards.
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I really liked it. The imagery of the flashbacks really moved me. great job! -MK
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good and sad
I think you did a great job letting us meet your friend. I'm sure you miss him dearly. Sorry for you loss
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Hi, nice little poem but has a few hiccups, for example THOUGH not THO, or although would be perhaps better, and cos would be frowned on by editors, would be worth doing an edit as it is a very nice little poem, all the best, Di
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This is obviously a dear friend floorboards,you're lucky to have had pleasure so limited in this day.Shug
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