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Circling

 




Answers thought to be hidden; digging deeper, ejecting

folder-filled drawers in a chaotic desperation for the

truth. A bitter loneliness sets in infesting my mind

with a sense of helplessness drowning in the

confusion of a numbing darkness. Cries

are muffled as the reverberation is

lost against the walls of my own

psychological padded cell.

Melancholy moods

slowly slump

further

d

o

w

n

seeping

between the

cracks and pooling

in an abyss of shadows.

Aimlessly traveling through a

mental labyrinth of desolation, while

asphyxiating on the transparent complexity

of unanswered questions. Overtaken by anxiety

and void of all senses, continually circling , searching

for a vault of light, the truth, all the lost answers to destiny.


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  • xox-lankan-xox
    December 16, 2006

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    Wow! VERY WELL WRITTEN! I'm amazed! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favourite lines were "seeping

    between the

    cracks and pooling

    in an abyss of shadows.

    Aimlessly traveling through a

    mental labyrinth of desolation, while

    asphyxiating on the transparent complexity

    of unanswered questions. Overtaken by anxiety

    and void of all senses, continually circling , searching

    for a vault of light, the truth, all the lost answers to destiny." Good luck and thanks again!

  • A Hollow Existence
    December 11, 2006

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    Excellent

    Wow, this is truly an amazing write. I've got to admit, you've already beat me in this contest. Keep it up.

  • She Stole My Voice
    December 9, 2006
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    Oh wow. This is one of my favorites by far. I love the picture that you put with your piece. Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing. Good luck inb my contest and thank you so much for entering

    ~Princess of Shadows~


  • Blazing White Wolf
    November 28, 2006
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    this is quite the sad write though well wrritten and there is that hour glass once again well done,My lioness
    Love,
    Master


  • poetryality silver member
    November 26, 2006

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    Emotionally Moving Poetry Here!

    This poem digs deeply into the well of despair and brings itself slowly (but with great command) to the core of desperation. There have been times in my life when I felt this low. Unbridled pain and discontent were the anvils that hit the hardest. Your work consumes the reader with a pitch that is darker than dark. What truly haunts me is that there are people that suffer this way on a daily basis.

    Oh! If there was some simple way to bring them from these recesses. Maybe your writing this will have someone identify and usher them from this place by simply seeing that they are not alone. This is a finely crafted masterpiece of of inner-lockings of a mind that seems to find no way to understand the word; "hope". Sad but elegant! Extremely well composed. And you say you are not the writer extraordinarie!? I beg to differ. Brilliant!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • Celticmoon
      November 26, 2006
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      Thank You Kindly!



      I thank you kindly my dear. Coming from you I consider these word a great honor. My writings are simple and my talent is quiet the same. I simply write what I feel and feel what I write. If I do not or can not feel it then it is not written; yes it is that simple. Unlike most my inspiration is not easily founded yet when it does come to pass it is usually something of a unique nature, or I think to think it is. My inspiration as of late has been, majority, of a single source; that is when I can manage to get my muse to dance. You see my muse often likes to play hide and seek with me -sigh- a game I am not quite fond of. Those pieces such as this I am never truly certain from which they come only that they do. This only leaves me to believe that at some point I must be feeling this way even if but only a few minutes so as to write in such a way. A great part of what I write falls under "Love and even times Erotica" but I do from time to time dabble within other genres.

      Nonetheless I am rambling, I would like to thank you once again fro gracing my work with your presence and your kind words.


  • Kari gold member
    November 26, 2006

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    deep

    wow this was wonderful...it was so so deep. I loved how you did the format with the word down..very clever
    Kari


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 26, 2006
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    Very intense, sweet sister mine! This touched deep into my heart and just made me want to reach out and hug you in a sisterly hug and tell you all will be well!
    Very moving!
    Love ya loads,
    Sandy


  • lavender shadows
    November 26, 2006

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    *tries to get the Broadway songs out of her head/mouth *

    Your smile face seems like a contradiction next to this piece. Such emotion, it tears at you, clawing as the write moves on. It would be interesting to find destiny's folder - all its hidden answers - yet I guess we have to find our way there. In time, we'll create it. Beautifully painful piece.

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