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I throw up .. blood comin' out of my throat ..
You want me to bleed ?!
Cut my vein!! squeeze it hard .. harder till it flushes!!
throw it away.. now it's time for another one..
It doesnt hurt me ..
It doesnt hurt me ..
Cut this one .. Bite it and suck the poison out of it!!
CLEAR!!
CLEAR !!
CLEAN me from this mess..
But you cant hurt me ..
you cant hurt me ..
My head hits the ground..
Fallin' down you scream my name ..
Leave me if you're not gonna miss me..
..at all ..
So gloomy, so dark that I cant see..
I'm half the way down ..
Helpless..
motionless
I lay in front of your vacant eyes ..
Lift me up..
Lift a hand ..
it's only me ..
and I'm bleedin' ..
.. for you ..
Are you enjoyin' ?!
well, you're drownin' in it too !! ..
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A contest entry
- prewrites by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended October 9, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
now you feel how it feels ?!
Comments
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I'm sorry, unfortunately I have nothing to really say. This just isn't my cup of tea.
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F'EN AMAZING!!!!!!!! What a write this is!!!!!! Sometimes we all feel this way I think! I really don't know what else to say this is just mindblowing!!! Keep that pen flowing!
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oh god !
how come this pain never shows on you ?
sometimes i mistake myself in thinking that i've caught a glimpse of it in your eyes...then i think not...
yet there it is !
amazing lil sis...
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dark and twisted just as you described it...but I loved it...great write.
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chilling
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can't say more...
How I love the darker side of you...
~Hana~
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dark, gory, twisted and fuckin dark!!
amazing piece babe..
keep up the great work
Take care
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Wow, you were really direct with this poem, and I defiantly winced when I read it, since it formed such a vivid (and gruesome) image in my mind. The third line in particular was really powerful. The poem sort of ran like a lyric, I thought, and I enjoyed reading it, even if it was chilling to read. Well done.
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TWISSSSSTED !!!!
"Cut my vein!! squeeze it hard .. harder till it flushes!!"
[...]
"Cut this one .. Bite it and suck the poison out of it!!"
damn how i love your dark side!!! heh!
seriously! this is really twisted and really dark and really heik... chilling? i duno.. very grrrr... very sick! (in all the good ways! heh)
"and I'm bleedin' ..
.. for you ..
Are you enjoyin' ?!
well, you're drownin' in it too !! .. "
perfect ending!!!
stay on the dark side of the paper..! heh
you rock gurl!
~rana~
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fucking-tastic
wowwwww creeeeeeeeeeepy *shiver*
loved the darkness all this blood all this screaming and they way you always organise your poems i just loved it you have a head on your shoulder girl i mean beside all that hair 
u have brains creative ones 
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