A
fool
I know
in my heart
this is selfish
and so very foolish
I just want to be read
I want to be.. remembered
I want someone to cry with me
because they have loved tooo deep
I want a woman to remember her lost love
and I want the old to recall a foolish moment in time
when they were young and to dumb... to know how to play
I want to cry in words with the innocent.. that gave it all away
I want someone to remember how very far I fell and how much I cared
I want to be ninety and still wishing for my lover to join me in bed at night
I wish to be loved beyond what is reasonable and expected... ever
and when I can not... I will weep like a child nightly
and wish forever for the past... so lost to me
I want wailing and weeping at my grave
I want to always have deep love
I want to be read lovingly
I want love always
a heart close
some one
caring
just
for
m
e
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LeeL
Author notes
I hope you will forgive me if this sounds a little selfish as you read. I am just wanting foolishly for my writing and my self to be remembered.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Loved your honesty in this poem...
I think as I've gotton older I wonder how my children will remember me and talk with their children about who I was. I don't have much to leave them but I hope the love I gave them will last after I'm gone. My poems are my way of leaving them alittle look into who I was other than just a Mom!
Thanks for sharing!
darlintlc
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What a great poem and a great shape! I loved the whole visual of the poem as mush as the words within. A refreshing honesty for declaring your want of rememberance and love. Well done!
alby
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alby
Pleased you like this verse
I did the shape for fun
Rick
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oh
you are so deeply loved here on ap
your one of the best poets here
and i pray all your wishes come true
bless you
you are published and you will be remembered
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wow this is deep and specific. I love it. you have mad talent for sincerity
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I liked it =)
Hey,
Well writen, I think we all want to touch and feel that deeply. to feel that never ending depth, i wish you well in your journey. You've more then likey have tugged quiet a few heart strings, in ways of opening up feelings one has perhaps thought lost.
C.
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my dear friend you are loved and i cherish you and your writing with all my heart. Your friendship is a blessing more than you will ever realize. many blessings always xxxxxx
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Hi Stardust
Thank you so much for caring for my writing
I appreate you as well my friend
Rick
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To always have deep love
Very nice poetry.
I think we all crave that love in our life.
I love to think of deep deep love myself.
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Silent
Thank you for saying very well written
I appreate you reading me
Rick
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My friend I am as sure as I'm sitting here you are soon to be asssured that you have touched many and left you mark upon the world. It won't take long, though it may seem like forever for the momentum to build. This is what I believe...
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Ithica
Love to believe what you say is true
I think we all feel this need to make a difference
I thank you, like your beliefs
Rick
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Remembered you shall be! I'll be bookmarking this one! Not only do I love the way you formed this poem, but I know exactly how you feel in your descriptions with love and devotion. Especially with the line of being ninety and still wanting your lover to come to your bed. Wonderful write!
Miss Marie
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Hi Marie
You are kind to read me
Pleased you saw my words in a good light
There are others I have made that exceed this
I thank you
Rick
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Absolutely amazing and soooo powerfuk. I started choking up because I can relate so much to your words.
I clicked on this title...with an idea of what I was getting into, and I was right. It was so touching and powerful. Great form, too.
I particularly liked-
"I want to cry in words with the innocent.. that gave it all away"
"and when I can not... I will weep like a child nightly
and wish forever for the past... so lost to me
I want wailing and weeping at my grave"
I love it, can't wait to read more.
I want someone to remember how very far I fell and how much I cared
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Hi Angel
Thank you for quoting me, your kind
Love to have you read something soft
Like "Forever and a Day" or "My Secret Heaven"
Check my Focus Poems
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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I just want to be read
I want to be.. remembered
the dream of every poet/poetess, i do believe. selfish or not, that is for you to decide. you wrote this well and i enjoyed the form. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie -
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Hi Rosemarie
This is an old verse I wanted to bring foward to be read
I forgot I wrote it. It is just my hopes
Thank you for caring for my words
Rick
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you want to love and to be loved. So tender are your words. You are one sweet poet.
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lovely write
I believe you have had and will have this
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Hi Michelle
I hope this is not just my selfish thoughts
In someways I thin we all have the same needs
Thank you my friend
Rick
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no foolish
but a great write that gives one better understanding of Rick, a powerful and touching confession that has the ability to squeeze the hardest heart and make it weep.
Smile,
Judy
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Hi Judy
Thank you for understanding me
My fear is that this would be viewed harshly
We have to be caushious what we wish for our selves
I wish i could spell adleast a little... lol
Thank you for the Roses
Rick
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Very well written
It was very good. I really like it.
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Hi elvish
Thank you for saying well written
Your very kind
Rick
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courageous write...
...I want this too, my friend, for you and for me...and even if it is selfish ...it is also loving...and aren't we all called to be so...loving?...you make it easy to love you...this is a gift to all of us who read it...just beautiful and I have no words beyond those that have been placed here by others before me...see?...you will be and are remembered...and you are not even gone from us... ...peace, now and always...Rhonda
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Hi Ronda
You write the nicest comments to me
Thank you for seeing and feeling my need
I remember my father, introspevtvly reviewing his life
Wondering if he did enough, wishing to be thought of as kind
I do hope this is natural of us to wish
I appreate your thoughts
Rick
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I think that poems like this are more for the eyes than the mind.. I mean yeah it looks cool and it's very artistically done.. but I'm just not a fan of it... there's more thought put into how it looks than how it sounds I think... but it's just my personal opinion.
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Tarja
I like your opion
You are clearly bright inside
This is just my thoughts in corse form
If you care to look further, this has multiable meanings
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3376766
This is a shape poem
Thank you for reading me
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Thank you Endeavor for understanding my opinion and not taking offense. I greatly admire your maturity. I will look into that piece you've sent thank you.
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You will always be remembered by me. A very sweet man with a velvet pen whose words touched the hearts of those who read his work. It is not selfish, it is human to want to be rememebered. I often wonder myself, if i disappeared right now, would anyone notice I was gone. There are times I doubt it would be noticed. I loved reading this and the imagery you have so eloquently woven into the pattern of words. Loved it.
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My Shadow
My Angel, You would be remembered by me
We are blessed to make words that relieve our soul
and give us thought to live well each day
I thank you for your great kindness
So pleased you understood my thoughts
Rick
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Rick, you will never ever be forgotten, for your dreams are the dreams of lovers all this world over. It is only you that can speak those words in such loving thoughts. Your words will always be read and cherished dear friend. Your friend in Poety, Sylvia, aka, Mysty Rain
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I have known you only a few hours and only though your carefully penned words, but rest assured a poet and a heart such of yours is not one forgotten easily.... I know you have touched a hardened heart in the miserable depths of a sad Australian night... so rest assured, you will be read and remembered dear one... even if it is only one person.... it is the world....
Karen
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Hi Karen
I did not know you read this
Thank you for caring for my words
I am pleased to have touched you in this way
Rick
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This is just lovely and a wonderful way to want to be remembered and thought of! Loved the form you wrote this in.
Blessings~
Az
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good!
I would want the same as you. For my words to be read with love and great emotion. For the ones I have alway loved to cry at my funeral. I want most of all too love forever deeply and for someone to love me just the same in return.
With love,
Molli
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Molli
All wonderfull thoughts
Perhaps I am not so selfish
I just feel it in these words
I thank you for your care
Rick
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This is that cappy influence seeping through the cracks
There is no forgiveness needed for wanting to
be something in the end, but what you cannot see yourself is there is already so much more within. I like the gentle touch of the tear drop shape!
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Autumn
Once a Cap always a Cap
I try to supress that side of me
It is better saved for matters of business
There it serves me well
Rick
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Dear Rick,
To be selfish, by definition, is to be: "concerned chiefly or only with yourself". I don't see that in these words.
"I want someone to cry with me
because they have loved tooo deep
I want a woman to remember her lost love
and I want the old to recall a foolish moment in time
when they were young and to(too) dumb... to know how to play"
All those lines speak of others, and your hopes for them as well as those for yourself. You have in a sense made apologies to those you've mishandled or misled, and you've expressed what is in essence, human nature. As others have already said, we all want to be loved, admired, and remembered long after we cease to walk on earth.Honesty does not equal selfishness, and being young and naive does not equal foolishness.
I have only one other suggestion (since another spelling fairy has already visited. ) and that is to italicize or bold “too” instead of writing it as “tooo”. I am guessing you wanted to put emphasis on that word, and that would accomplish it without making it look like a spelling error. As always, just a suggestion.
The form of this is also beautiful, and I applaud your honesty as well as your skill with words within this write.
Much love,
~J.
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It is not selfish to want love, it is human.
I love this, and will remember it. Even if dont know you well. Everyone has an impact on everyone around them, whether it be small or great, it is still an impact.
-the dear Emma
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Emma
Wonderfull words to write to me
I thank you and will visit your page
Rick
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"I want to be ninety and still wishing for my lover to join me in bed at night"
Now that's fantastic!!!
This whole piece is extrememly well written... it's got such a peaceful flow... the wording is incredible.
Just an all around good piece this is!!!
~Melissa
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Melissa
Thank you for saying "well written"
I think there is somthing beyound sacrad when a woman lays with a man, even if they are still. It is no less, than a confermation of continued commitment.
That is why I made the words as I did
If you look below the surface, there are many more thoughts to be seen.
Rick
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appluase .. again
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thats not foolish at all
Most people want to be loved .. remembered
and especially when they work to create pieces of art
they want to be read
they want someone to appreciate the talent and flow you put on paper
its only natural
not foolish my dear friend
i love how you turned the poem into a shape
great job
keep it up
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NeVeR
Sorry, I did not relieze you had read this. You are so sweet
I thank you. The shape took time to work the words, Rick
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I want to be ninety and still wishing for my lover to join me in bed at night
your open heart is beautiful Rick and I love this poem as it is from the very centre of love, And as with any centre will always be selfish and so it should be x perfect feeling of losing all barriers Rick x
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Lonely
Thank you for understanding my words and not condeming my selfish thoughts.
I thank you, Rick
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beautiful
very soft spoken words. the sound of this poem provides the reader with a feeling of being concerned for the writer because they have acutally opened up and shared their deepest thoughts. shaping it was the cream of the crop. loveley poem.
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Hi Dawn
You are correct and I am laying my self out to be aired a bit, to relieve and reviele, my selfish thoughts. I think we all have these, I just think of mine more. To say concern was caring, Rick
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I am not understanding this.
so i'll leave no comment.
love you joyce
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Joyce
Read the comments sweety, like Michelle. This is just me reflecting on the past and future. On my sins and my wishes.
Love, Rick
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Excellent
Rick,
A heartfelt write with simple words telling a true story. How can it not be beautiful. This is every man and womans deepest thoughts and hopes. Love the lines:
I want to cry in words with the innocent.. that gave it all away
I want someone to remember how vary far I fell and how little I cared
A heartfelt winner. Bob
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My Brother, My Friend
Several have quoted the same words which seem to have impact
"I want to cry in words with the innocent.. that gave it all away" Just to expand on this verse
I think back to the girls in my youth, that loved me, and did give it all foolishly, and I cared little except for the lust. I hope they remember me as a young silly boy.
Some of this is above and below the line
It is all up to the reader
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So much beauty here....your heart and soul shines with it....I so loved reading this....smiles, Terry
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Terry
I thank you for liking my selfish thoughts, Rick
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very good
I like this heartfelt write, especially with this form, I forgot what it is called, but have tried to do it, to no avail. This is my favorite line;
I want to cry in words with the innocent.. that gave it all away
I am used to reading your joyous love poems, but I enjoyed reading this other side of it. Your honesty is beautiful, yet I feel sad.
we all want
love
to make a differance
be missed
and wanted
by someone
there need to be a few corrections
I want a women (woman) to remember her lost love remember how vary (very) far I fell
I want to be ninty (ninety)
to be loved beyound (beyond)
read lovenly (lovingly)?
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Michelle
You were the first to comment and got the meaning stright away
we all want
love
to make a differance
be missed
and wanted
by someone
It is true and even more true as we get older and contliplate the foot prints left behind
Thank you for the corrections, spelling correctly made me have to change somethings to make them fit again, great..lol
Rick
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