“Come to me, child of the moon…”
the Night Wind cried and sighed
and would not be denied.
Moon Child stood very still, unyielding,
alone on a stalwart mesa
where sand scoured the soul.
“I cannot, for I do not live…”
called Moon Child to the restless wind
that blew her skirt.
“If you speak, you live, my child…”
Wind whirled round Moon Child in dusty desperation.
“I breath, but do not live…”
said the pale fragment of flesh,
standing still as death.
Wind played its tune
upon her cheek, crescendos vivid,
but it stirred nothing
in the heart of Maiden Moon Child.
All the long day Wind argued,
cajoled and teased, taunted
and whispered secrets long unheard.
But Moon Child would not be moved.
Her silence echoed from the mesa
and reverberated off canyon walls.
At last Moon Child spoke her story:
“I loved and loved well,
with all the being within me, I loved.
He took my love and ground it into the soil,
spat on it and destroyed
its lovely essence with his callous hate.”
“Forever more shall I stand here,
guardian of the hearts of women
who give of themselves to unworthy
monsters whose fists flail and whose tongues
cut the throats of she
who faithfully stands by in innocent waiting.”
And thus the Maiden stands yet, upon the Mesa of the Moon,
ever alert to hearts that cry with sour rejection and are bereft of hope.
In a list
A contest entry
- --and the rock was gray by SurelyWritten.
430 points, ended November 29, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading my work!
Comments
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Delightful
I liked this because aside from being emotive, it also had some concrete structure to it
now I know there's no such thing as a perfect poem, but this comes neatly close
I could live through the tale, embrace it,
and I could touch the poet's verdict as well, though I do not completely agree with it
nevertheless a point is well displayed, my personal opinion on the idea is another issue
I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing
what;s a mesa ?
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Very Sad
Well written, but does not rhyme (my preference).
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An interesting encounter, these two. A tale told with great meaning and respect. I wanted to be in that story. Thoroughly enjoyable. ~Pamela
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Beautiful!! Awesome Imagery!!!
I love this wonderful tale of patience and forbearance, the li'l Moon Child's spirit filled with much wisdom, yet is so delicate in heart. She stands taller than Ms. Liberty on the shores of hope and freedom for humanity. Thank you so much for sharing your talented muse with all of us, I really enjoyed reading this magically enchanting poem!! Peace Always, Cyn
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Enraptured
I personally loved this narrative and was enraptured, so rich in descriptive emotion, I was heart touched, that dear Moon Child with the huge heart, wonderful my dear Wolfies Lib x x s
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beautiful
the moon she shines forever on
into the present from days far gone
amillion tears of hope she sees
from hopeless hearts bent to thier knees
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its a very nice poem. what i like about it is the hatered the love the lust and the spirits. you are a really good writing keep it u
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This was a very interesting write.
i found many emotions tied into it.
Hurt, love, spiritual.
keep up the good work!
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This is wonderful write. It so empowering it kind of hard to get one self estem back after a hurting relationship. I love how you wrote this write. It shows that healing can take place.Great work. I love it.
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This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read dealing with domestic violence.You should of won a gold with this one.
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Thank you for this most lovely comment. I appreciate meeting someone new who is so pleasant and thoughtful!
Wolfie
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I love the thought of such an everlasting extricate & omnipresent being! I also love the thought of the mollifying effects such a presence must behold in their heart for others, Very well thought out by anyone's standards!
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Moon Child is to be treasured! Worthy of a Manuscript!
Get it written! You've got something here!!!!!!!
~~pithyAplomb.
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This touches the heart...deeply and speaks of a spirit that was broken from violence. A shame it is...
But strength lies dormant unless tapped into and released.
You have a very serene way of writing dear.
I very much enjoyed this.
Becky
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Enduring domestic violence is a lonely burden to bear. It would perhaps not be a bad idea to dismember all male humans. First it would solve the problem of over population and second it would do away with many types of violence (if not all). I have two daughters and if (GOD forbid) I ever hear of one being mistreated, I will personally make sure it will never take place again in the most radical of ways perceivable. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
Chris
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WOW
this is one of the most powerful poems i have ever read!!! This has an amazing blend of sadness, pain, promise and strength. Absolutely fantastic!!! very descriptive & picturesque! I could fee l the wind & hear it's calling as I read. This is an excellent write!
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Oh wow this is just simply beautiful. I love the descriptions of the moon child. ive always loved the moon its a treat reading it.
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This poem was a very good poem.
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Your poetry touches people, Wolfie,
and the amazing thing is, once touched,
hearts open.
You are pure magic.
Love, Lane
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This is breathtaking!
Honor and grace be granted to the Moon Child!
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BANDITS UNITED!
Fantastic work on this masterpiece mum, your words affect the reader my dear friend...such strength in your message, and a message penned in such a way that it will be memorable long after reading...you have made this so interesting by the meterphorical story and images you've given us...
Overall impact: So engaging...intense emotions...powerful message...vivid imagery...thought provoking...moving...good flow...well thought out story...expressive and poetic
Thanks for sharing your talent for writing with us here today
Much love from your ~daughter
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"Her silence echoed..." this was a lovely penning, sad but beautiful. I see why it is among the popular reads of the week! Excellent penning
and my pleasure to read ~Tia
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BANDITS UNITED
This is an excellent work of art. I've never thought of penning down something quite like it.....Having read it now and in fact having quite enjoyed myself, I have to tell you it's so wonderfully penned. I love it. Great Job!
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amazing
i love this poem...i can relate to the character..moon child..I Love how its story but it rolls of you tounge like a poem would..its Really good..
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BANDITS UNITED !!
This is a beautiful yet sad tale of unrequited love. I love the excellent imagery and fresh phrases you have used. This line is soooo good:
Her silence echoed from the mesa and reverberated off canyon walls.
I am going to bookmark this gem so I can re-read it in the future.
Well Done my fellow Bandit!
Bandits Forever!
Dennis :^)
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BANDITS UNITED.
The third stanza stands out for me, "if you speak'etc but it is a fascinating story, and so well done.
Peace
Ronn
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You are very sweet and I am honored. I love this group of very special poets!!
Wolfie -
Thank you dear - women's safety means a lot to me. I am sorry not to answer sooner, but am ill and didn't see I was spotlighted until a bit ago.
Wolfie
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Bandits United!!
This is was an amazing write but so sad. I loved it you write so well. Keep it up.
Never give up
Kate
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BANDITS UNITED!
This is a beautiful poem, yet so sad. I only hope she can give those souls the comfort they so need . . . Lovely narrative!
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BANDITS UNITED
to me moon children have alwasy been young wolves or coyotes, very nicely done piece upon the Mesa of te moon and within all our hearts and souls.
JD
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Thank you for your kind words. Do you know you look like Kevin Costner?? Cute, cute and talented poet.
Wolfie
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bandits united
Nicely done. I like the alliteration, but especially the internal rhyming of the second line. That was nicely done!!! -
Bandits United
You have told such a brilliant story through your words. I truly enjoyed this piece. The words tell a story of rejection and sadness. great work!
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Bandits United
Wow this is fantabulous. What a story. You are sure to win. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Poor Moon Child... -
Bandits United!
Phew ~ this is one POWERFUL piece of poetry!
You have interwoven story-telling with a magical sense of mystery and wonder connecting the female spirit, the earth and the moon, all in a spiritual way. Very native American, very beautiful.
Albeit this poem is based on a sad theme, there is nonetheless a feeling of stoisism and a sense of intimacy with the power of the earth that will never be dominated.
I love this piece!
Well written, and BRAVO, dear POET!
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Bandits United!
Well you had me hooked from
“Come to me, child of the moon…”
the Night Wind cried and sighed and would not be denied.
and from there it just got beter and better, you certainly know how to drown your readers in your words ( I mean that in the nicest way). What a story, what an experience and what a wonderfull poet you are.
3 applauses is not enough.
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BANDITS UNITED!
Mom, what a wonderful story!! So full of wonderful imagery and emotions It is so nice too know that she is out there protecting others from the hands of abuse. I could feel her pain. Excellent flow, just amazing
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Bandits United!!!
A lovely story written here, and written so well the words flow with ease and the tones are perfect and a grand imagery... just a lovely write hope you enjoy your day in the spotlight !!! so much fun...
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BANDITS UNITED!!
What a story!! So sad! It's good to know that there's someone looking out for those women who have nowhere to turn. Your word choices in this piece are wonderful and make your imagery really strong. Amazing piece. >pixxie<
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BANDITS UNITED!
An excellent write and presentation. A delightful story, emotion packed. Lovely imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Very good word choice and alliteration. Nice assonance. You are a talented storyteller. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read.
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BANDITS UNITED!!! Really enjoyed your write and the end where the sun tells her sad story...it is sad. But the moon is saved by our empathy and companionship. Great story.
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Bandits United!
What a delight to read this early morn.
I love Native American poetry, to which no doubt this belongs to.
I have a poet friend who writes Native American poetry and you'll probably will like her writings too. Here's the link to her website http://marge.netpoets.net/
Thank you for giving us this beautiful gift.
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Bandits United!!!
What a beautiful and touching poem. It is very well crafted and the alitteration is excellent!
Love & Light
Debbera
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BANDITS UNITED
wow one who has been abuse can really relate to this message. I love the graphic it has the moon and wolf which is very cool. This flow so smoothly the content is excellent. It speaks to the heart. At the end you feel so sad. This is a great write. Very in depth. Hope you are doing well and life treating you better.
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BANDITS UNITED !!!
This is so sad yet filled with the compassionate heart of the Maiden Moon Child. How comforting to know that this spirit is watching over us in our endeavors for love.
I love this poem, Sherry. It's going straight into my bookmarks
Dee
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BANDITS UNITED! This is your day in the spotlight. What a lovely tale you tell here in these words - great flow and alliteration throughout these lines.
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Bandits United!
Beautifully penned my Friend and You speak with compassionate wordsThey radiate through the screen!
Love this!!
Powerful words in parenthesis
Thank You for sharing this~~
Best wishes to You
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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BANDITS UNITED !!
I am glad I can read this poem so early in the morning because it is very well penned and such a joy to read. This write has a sadness to it that I could feel, but still this was so beautiful.
Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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BANDITS UNITED !! YES!!
HA! You are the lucky poet who gets our appreciation and this poem definitely deserves notice! 
Line upon line of images that swirl around the reader like a mist of enchantment! 
I love poetry that has a story!
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Here be a moon child... I remember this...Yep. I found the owl... Hey wolfie I loved the poem you wrote me in the contest of me by Carol D. Yours was my favorite. That forests of men like him... unmade me. All the best to you, and goodnite...
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I am an avid fan and every work was from the heart... thanks for the nice words on my poem!
Wolfie
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WOW! What a beautiful and touching poem this is and it definitely resonates within my heart.
The lines that touched me the most are:
"At last Moon Child spoke her story:
“I loved and loved well, with all the being within me, I loved.
He took my love and ground it into the soil,
spat on it and destroyed its lovely essence with his callous hate."
I am thankful to see the hope that you give the reader as the poem closes. We all who have love and lost and are still "hanging in there waiting for that Knight in Shining Armour to appear" are filled with loads of optimism knowing that there is someone out there watching over us.
I love the border of your poem. This poem has a very nice title, flows beautifully and has a nice choice of words that keep the reader glued till the end.
May the Creator bestow many blessings upon you for writing this poem.
All the best,
Charishma
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very interesting. i can ee why this was in a poe contest, very eary feel to it.
Your pup
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wonderful write here, truly breath taking,
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I felt like the moon child tonight, and was on my way to your archives to read this, when I saw it linked to your page.. I have a terrible cold, so I am relieved that it was there and I didn't have to go searching.
Anywho, its as wonderous as the first time I read it.... I always see a new emotion on the face I imagine, it is a wonderful confounding lovely feeling. Beautiful as always darling. Take care, and many hugs Wolfie
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Love it
Truly love this work of art it touches the heart and soul on one being. I want to take the time to tell you how much I admire your work. I love you so much. Hope you have a great Chirstmas. Sending much love and a renew spirit. Take care love you daughter earthstar
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*Mystifying*
Being of the birthsign "Cancer" Inaturally had to click here first
Indeed I am so glad I did. It fallters me greatly to know that my humble lil writes have drawn the attention of a true elder soul and I make not that observation by number of trophys adorning her home page but by reading and living the magic of a work such as this.
Sad as the tale may be you've touched the heart of this hopeless rom,antic with it and even inspired a sensation of warmth in feeling that there is this "mystical moon child" watching over the dear sweet lifegivers who are hurt by unthoughtful men.
I myself must admit that I am a lover of hope. You inspire such to the reader in this piece the best by leaving with them in the end. I feel a great importance in ending a poem for that to me is the strongest point of impression upon most all readers. You have done so skillfully well here and I am looking forward to the next
wonderous write which I am about to read. You deserve my eger applause with this write along with these 's for making this Cancerean's eyes all dreamy.
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Wow, this is nice. It's very original too. I liked the rhymes in the second line and alliteration throughout. Nicely done!
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oh, wow...
this was wow...beautiful!
your words created such amazing imagry! i like the way your word usage spoke...like a legend...
i reallyl iked this one Mummy
♥ Lynn
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Thank you, pretty baby
I thank you for taking time to read and comment on the poem. It was something that just flowed,,, as if I had known it all along.
hugs Mummy *heart*
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She can speak to them not to give the monsters any more power, by taking back life...
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Wow, I sure have missed you and reading of your poetry. I haven't been on AP in a while, for I have been so busy. I just hope to be back on more often so I can read more of your work. God bless you and hope God is working still to this day in your life. I love you and this I love your work. You never cease to amaze me. Keep writing. God bless you.
Love your daughter in Christ Jesus,
Tabitha-Robin:
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I related to this in a very personal way, my daddy used to call me his 'moon child' because I was always sneaking out at night to watch the stars and the moon. So the whole time I was reading this, I felt as if I were the moon child again, just pulling and absorbing hope from nature.. I loved it.
I also liked the style of this, the freeness of it. The monologue, it is very genuine and serene. It flows nicely because of the slowed pace.
I think I enjoyed this the most because when I read it, I was begining to feel sorry for myself for personal reasons, one of them being loneliness. I know from many of your works that you have felt lonely often, and your latest comment on 'side-stepped ironies' made me realize that even more. So I think that is why this stands out to me so much, because I don't think you planned on writing something this stunning, I think it just flowed out of you out of need.
I guess the only constructive thing I have to say, would be...;
Work on some of the wording maybe, 'moon child', is used alot during the course of the poem, it may sound better if you find a way to cut it in some places or find a synonym word or phrase. Yes, I think word popularity is the only thing that I would work on in this piece. Other than that it's magnificent! (working on this suggestion will be hard considering the theme revolves around the 'moon child', but I think it is still worth a try )
I completely loved this, have confidence in your talent Wolfie, let no one desparage (sp?) you in that.
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Excellent
Having read this I think you may have heard of the legend of Kaguya goddess of the moon, there is a myth, I think it may possibly be Japanese. Anyway Kaguya is the goddess of moon and comes to earth to help people, who hearts cry out with unrequited love and take them to a the bridge of dreams where upon arriving they are granted one wish, which damns there heart or releases their desires. I will not go into the full story but your poem is very comparable to the above legend.
Did you know the above?
There was a good flow and the rhyme and meter was very easy to read, the subject and tone was very well set in both atmosphere and style of poetry. The language was broad and not over-shadowed by the excellent subject/tone combination.
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Wow! I must must read about this legend of the Kaguya Goddess. Can you guide me to her legend or myth as you say?
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Applaud
Wonderful Write!
I love to read your poems. You always make the words come to life.
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Awww, this is so very sad. I love sad, romantic stories. I really like the border that goes with it too. It reminds me or a moral. some important lesson you are supposed to learn.
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Lady Altheia
Thank you, sweetheart. I wasn't sure where to go with a poem for this - but my muse hasn't let me down lately. You may copy this border or any border of mine, as well as pictures.
hugs Mommy Wolfie
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Awsome Write
Words like these come from real life.Love the flow and imagery that leaps out at me.Great write,for the setting seems overtaken with emotions.Loved it.Reminds me of how my grandmother would tell us stories in poetry.Awesome,Truely Awesome....God Bless..
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Good poem!!!!!! Very beautiful, but sad. I love your title “Moon Child”, your word was very powerful, and the flow in lines is great.
White diamond
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Sad is sometimes beautiful
I appreciate you taking time to read my poem and leave a very nice comment! I often write this sort of mystical thing... it calls to me.
hugs Wolfie
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Howling with you
Wolfheart I so enjoyed the story telling in this with your visual production, I have always believed my spirit guide is a wolf and this reads like a mantra of a native american tale, loved it so much thanks for writing your wonderous words.
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The theme of this poem is the lack of fufilling all that Moon Child could be because of hurts and abuses to her..It is sad, and a legend that the author has with her imagination derived an anwer to the cause of women...and that they rise to their calling..The title is appropriate, and the call of the moon to Moonchild is a good lead sentence..The last sentence is powerful" the maiden stands yet ..for those bereft of hope.'
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Thank you, dear Angel
Sometimes the subject of abuse creeps in where I never intended. I so want women to be able to avoid the horror I went through, and I guess the thoughts are always hovering. Thank you for your time in reading and your nice comment!
Hugs - Wolfie
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Whoa. This is as enthralling as the whoel of the wolf before a full moon. Full of so much seemingly pain and sorrow, yet sharing its love for all to hear.
Beautiful!
Marianne
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How sweet!
Thank you for taking time to comment on my work! Your words warm my heart.
hugs Wolfie
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this is so beautiful. you are a talented poet. maybe one day I will be able to write like this
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Great Work, Wolfie. As always, I love the way you write. I try never to miss any of yours, though I'm sure I have. Your story here is one of great imagery. I love it. Good luck in the contest, hope you win big.
Jodygirl
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You are so pretty!
Thank you for reading and commenting. When you have written as long as I have - almost 60 years, I am sure your work will be divine!
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Thanks, Jody
Thanks for taking your time to stop by and read, comment. Your words make my efforts worthwhile.
hugs Wolfie
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A BEAUTIFULLY SAD PIECE, INDEED!
Forever more shall I stand here,
guardian of the hearts of women who give of themselves to unworthy
monsters whose fists flail and whose tongues
cut the throats of she who faithfully stands by in innocent waiting.”
And thus the Maiden stands yet, upon the Mesa of the Moon,
ever alert to hearts that cry with sour rejection and are bereft of hope.
A wonderful ending to a magical and yet sad piece that I fear will never come to an end for as long as hearts are broken by a foolish man who is to blind to see what a gift a fine woman is - MOON CHILD will live on. GOOD LUCK in the contest and Thanks SO MUCH for featuring this beautiful piece for otherwise i would have sadly missed it today - and now I know where I'll be leaving my free three applauses of the day!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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I am honored
Thank you for this outstanding comment and for your kindest thoughts. I admire your work, therefore this comment means that much more to me~
hugs Wolfie
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lovcely story weaved in this piece with a dep meaning and awareness of the abuse that takes place. There is nice imagery and flow to this piece with some slick rhyming here and there well done, wolfie
Love and Light,
Blaze
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I thank you!
I had no idea when I started what I would write, so it all belongs to the God-given muse that uses my fingers to tap out the tune.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment. Creator bless you.
hugs Wolfie
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She Looks over Us Women
She looks over us women that are not loved in return for her true love! Thank you Moon Child for watching over us. We women are strong, but sometimes we cannot stop loving those monsters that grind us to dirt.
A wonderful tale you weave here, but so true in life!
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Thank you, dearest
It just flowed into my head - you know how that goes. I appreciate you taking time to read and comment on my work!
luvnhugs Wolfie
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Aw, thankyou Wolfie, I'm so glad you entered my contest. I was secretly hoping you would. My eyes are delighted to read yet again the stunning wonderous words your pen is frothing with!
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Shirley
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Wouldn't miss it!
I love free verse - it gives your muse a thousand directions to flow! Thank you for the time and effort you will put into hosting this contest.
hugs Wolfie
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