love
my parent’s native language
spoken fluently
until they passed away
the few words I picked up
were not nearly enough
At eight I accused them
of speaking an alien dialect
at twelve I was convinced
from whispers
behind closed doors
I wasn’t meant to hear
but I did
at each of their wakes
it was more obvious
from acquaintance to best friend
divulging the truth
they were angels
sent from above
then it dawned on me
whether good times or bad
in sickness and in health
though it felt we were rich
but much closer to poor
they always managed to bring
their Heaven to Earth
whoever sent them was wise indeed
our planet Earth a better place
for having them here
A contest entry
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this was a very pretty write. The title made me chuckle a little. I liked your story about how wonderful your parents were. It was a beautiful dedication.
this was a very nice entry. thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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damn,
gawd that was seriously good~ i mean from the bottom of my heart kind of awesome.
i'm so liking the first stanza... do you think i could put in on my authors page as a quote? course i'll put all the "writen by..." etc.
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I hope you show this to your parents it would make their day Good luck in the contest
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Super fine poem!
Lovely! Inspiring and oh so truly well taken by myself, who loves to be inspired!
I am sending you a gift: 
and a hug 
and also my thanks for coming to our alien invastion!
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very original
very nice, check out my page for some nice poems -
touching
that was a very moving piece and I really enjoyed reading it. I'm sorry for your loss. Good luck
Bel
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wow.. simply amazing. The title grabbed my attention, and then the writing was simply (forgive the pun) out of this world. Great job.
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Inspiring read!
I have to admit, I was fascinated by the title of your poem, as you had not listed a category, but was very pleasantly surprised, on reading this fine tribute to your parents. The free-verse style, suits the content of the poem and I found the whole work very moving, especially the ending. The humour in the second verse also makes it very endearing to the reader, as many people will have similar memories as children.
Ann -
OH MY!! I love this! Wow! okay, line 1, love, that is the language your parents spoke, it took me a couple more lines to realize that and loved how you worded that, it was perfect. Yes, those in love do have their own language. lines 9-13 were so cute, since that is the age we really get curious on this mysterious closeness our parents have, that one part that seems to exclude us. Line 25, 26 was wonderful, bringing their heaven to earth, wow. lines 27,28,29 were so sweet and tender. This is an amazing tribute to what must have been amazing parents, since they obviously have an amazing child. Wonderful job on this one.
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THIS IS AWSOME I LOVE IT
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Coooool!
Did you take pictures? LOL J/K. Hey this is inspirational and good writing. It is good to know that after so much you still love and adore your parents. Most people just get annoyed by them when they grow up. Great write.
I Love My Mommy!!!!!!!!!
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Excellent!
This is a wonderful dedication to your loving parents. I love the way you have placed a witty little twist to it. Who knows where we come from really. I suspect we are all angels in training. Now we have to figure out what an angel really is. Great Write! ~PeacE~GarY~ -
Very good!
This so sweet! I find chidren write wonderfully for their parents but never quiet like this. It's trully wonderfull to know how you feel about them and its a very well written poem! -
Powerfulwordsofacceptance.
This, is a rock of the heart for me. It's sharings like these, that have me showing up to allpoetry in the first place! -
Inspired
This is so true, spoken as a child who never thought parents knew anything when in fact as we grow we learn they knew everything we didn't!! I loved how you wove this story and the fabric of it was just perfect.
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