Young and full of life
Say hello to the baker's wife
Receive a cookie or maybe two
One for me and one for you
Skipping down the bright cheerful lane
Chewing on a red and white candy cane
Hold on to the happiness of being young
Cling to the luxury of not being strong
Stay little and carefree as long as you can
Don't leave childhood just to have a fan
Being a kid is full of glee
The only way your mind can stay free
Being a kid goes by too fast
So try your hardest to make it last
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Author notes
I wrote this because I tend to wish to be three.
option 4
A contest entry
- Ages 12 & Under ONLY - Write How You Feel! by Amunet Wolfbane.
525 points, ended December 3, 2006, 14 entries
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Ironically enough,
In this poem about childhood,
You grew a lot as a writer.
No spelling mistakes,
A LOT less forced rhyming than you did 2 years ago, and it's something that relates to everybody, whether you're young and wanting to get older, or older, missing your youth.
Funnily enough, when I was little,
I didn't want to grow up...
I just wanted to grow, so I could reach to Popsicles my mom kept in the top of the freezer. Weird, eh?
And Kimmie, you aren't the only one who tends to wish they were three, sometimes I wish that too,
Innocence was such a great thing.
Good write, it was really cute.
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"Being a kid goes by too fast" - I completely agree!
Nice rhyme, and a cute write! Thanks for entering the contest and good luck! -
Hm~
youth. ahh such a awesome thing to be
me, being the same age as you (or almost) can feel the happiness of it. in full.
congratulations on the Hm -
You know, sometimes... I totally wish I was three too! Life was so much easier back then
You had a great upbeat tone to the piece, which is awesome. The rhyming gave the piece a fairly smooth flow. Great job! 
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As a kid want long to grow up and when grown up we long to go back to being a kids again
We can't seem to make up our minds. But being a kids is a good thing that doesn't last long so one should enjoy it while they can.
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I thought the rhyme was pretty good, it had a smooth, flowing pace which is what all rhyming poems need.
As for the meaning, this was very strong.
I didn't see any spelling errors, kudos to you.
I thought you did a good job on this. Good luck to you in the contest.
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There is a very beautiful message inside the lines here I remember from when I was still a kid - I couldn't wait to be a grown up so I could do all kind of 'adult' stuff like staying up late
Now that I'm an adult, I sometimes look back with nostalgia to the times when I was still a kid - and had nothing to worry about... well written
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Quite a catchy piece. It looked familiar to me a bit, but I can't place why. Your flow is well done and it does have a good message here. GReat job!
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