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*-Aphrodite-*


With her lips tempting for a lusting kiss,

with the sweet deception of innocence planted on her lips.

Hair long and blonde flowing down her elegant back,

her eyes so enchanting she will have you on your knees.

Men beware the mighty Goddess of love,

for another of her godly names is seductress.

Woman of mystery appears to innocent,

the men all want to take that innocence from her teasing eyes.

Not of marital love more of the affair,

to those married or commited sweethearts beware.

Her enchanting eyes and her flawless breasts,

leaves a man with no sanity left.

The Goddess will have whomever she does please,

for she controls the lustful men of all ages.

When you fall for her you know it will not last,

the Goddess has no intention for setting down her acts.

Author notes

Not used of writing in this genre so go easy on me no not really, honesty counts a lot with me. This is how I picture the lady that people seem to think I resemble.

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  • Emmyb gold member
    March 17

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    beautiful poem. very descrptive and imaginative. well done! was just browsing through your work and I do love this one; Emmyb


  • Lady Michaella
    February 11
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    wow.. this is a beautiful contest..really great

    -Lemon Bee-
    xx


  • kidwithgun silver member
    August 31, 2008

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    very good poem. i see the underlying issue in this.
    young men, open your bibles and read Proverbs 5:3-23
    and please, don't stop there =)


  • Nikki Rowles
    June 13, 2008

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    I personally like the poem...better than I would have done, honest comments yes...helpful...not so much so don't get mad at me please if I don't help you improve


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 11, 2008

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    I love the description. Gosh you've got a lot of talent. So I thought I would read many of your poems to see if I really like your poetry and I really do. I wish I had your talent and the ease it seems you have with words. Keep it up.


  • Hecate616
    January 24, 2008

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    Not of marital love more of the affair,
    to those married or commited sweethearts beware.
    Her enchanting eyes and her flawless breasts,
    leaves a man with no sanity left.

    I love that stanza. Amazing write and best of luck!


  • PersephoneInWinter
    December 28, 2007

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    very descriptive, i like that!

    i like how you modernized this and kept a lot of the elements that the romans and greeks associated with aphrodite.

    thank you so much for entering!

    LXF


  • yogi59
    November 23, 2007
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    Good write.


  • Poetry and I Inc
    November 21, 2007

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    Bravo, bravo! Impressive prewrite here. Thanks for your entry dear. Good luck in the contest. You've done a great job depicting the goddess. Loved that last line.
    ~Mstrss"


  • Tercil gold member
    August 2, 2007
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    having appreciated the Greek Gods myself, namely Eos, the similarites regarding their virute is paramount, and gives a lovely story line, nicely woven agenda of her story. Quite an awkward story it is, come to think of it. Attracted to men, but remaining elusive is something very much I see in the ideal woman.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 25, 2007
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    WOW this was a great write, thank you for entering it in my contest.


  • Lie 2 Me Once Again
    June 19, 2007
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    Great write! Thanks for entering


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    May 5, 2007

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    Wow you wrote about Aphrodite very well,you got her to a "T" you definitely have talent Keep it up hun,it is nice sometimes to step out of your normal genre sometimes you can amaze yourself,great job


  • SurelyWritten
    May 3, 2007
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    thank you for entering, and good luck

  • Virgoan
    April 26, 2007

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    This is a good poem. The goddess of love well depicted using contemporary thoughts as well as your point of view. The imagery is amazing and so is the flow.

    My favorite lines:

    With her lips tempting for a lusting kiss,
    with the sweet deception of innocence planted on her lips.
    Hair long and blonde flowing down her elegant back,
    her eyes so enchanting she will have you on your knees.

    The way you have started the piece gave a really strong feeling and have shown a brilliant poem.

    One thing though, I wish it could have been longer. There is some wanting in the poem that it says that there is something else. The poem seems to be ended forcefully not in a bad manner because it was still ended good. Just my thought.

    Overall, regardless of its length you've penned this poem well.

    Thanks for sharing and see you around.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • Tangled Angle
    April 18, 2007
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    Yes

    Not bad. Next time around show me more, don't tell.


  • bigXfatXemo
    April 17, 2007

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    Oh I loved the language you've used! Really wonderful imagery here, I can see why you've had such success in the contests =] Bravo, keep writing!
    Frankie xXx


  • risewiththesmoke
    February 23, 2007
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    good descriptive wording, thanks for entering


  • Kei-Aira
    February 4, 2007

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    This poem is quite nice, but so hard to read. the rbight background and tiny italicised font just really distracts so much.

  • dgallello
    February 1, 2007

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    theres not much for me to say about this poem except for i love the ending so much, and the poem as a whole is also brilliant. wowww :


  • Sokarjo
    January 31, 2007
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    Thanks for the entry! Great poem. it seems that sometimes you rhyme and sometimes you don't; is that intentional? Also, there's a few things I think you forgot from the contest rules; please add if you will. Thanks a lot for entering my contest; good luck!


  • lucy sky-diamond
    January 21, 2007
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    a very good poem, i like the light you have put cats in, but i feel in places like;
    Hair long and blonde
    and
    her flawless breasts
    you have kind of veered away from the subject of cats. but thank you very much for your entry, and good luck

  • Trophies That Shine
    January 18, 2007
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    Whhoot this was great I really enjoyed it The best of luck to you in the contest.


  • ZorroTheFox silver member
    November 28, 2006
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    another nice write, though the color made me squint a bit.


  • Lost-Rose-Petal
    November 27, 2006
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    WOW!!!! AMAZING WRITE!!! EXACTLY WHAT I WANTED!!! I LOVE THE DESCRIPTIVE WORDS AND HOW I CAN PICTURE HER IN MY MIND!!! WONDERFUL!!! ONCE AGAIN GREAT WRITE AND GOOD LUCK IN MY CONTEST!! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK AND WRITE MORE LIKE THIS!!!
    MINDIE @---^---
    (LOST-ROSE-PETAL)


  • Timmy S Edgar
    November 25, 2006
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    ..:: I'm In Love ::..

    Wow i love this poem well done


    Timmy S. Edgar © 2006

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