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Shattered Heart

My heart shattered
Into a thousand glass pieces
All because of you
Of all the pain and hurt you caused
I didn’t believe it was true
With the expression “Love is blind”
That was the truth with us
I never saw the pain you left
Till there was nothing else in me
You treated me like I wasn’t there
It seemed like nothing was wrong
Now I’m left in a corner
Listening to our stupid song

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  • blondone
    May 2, 2007
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    please put your user name in the authors comment


  • blondone
    April 29, 2007
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    A great write but have not followed the rules

  • schobbesnax
    April 26, 2007

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    5 stars

    I love this poem so heart felt you definitly must have had your heart broken you poor thing but i definitly love it keep up the heart felts love it emenselly


  • Saxyncreative
    April 11, 2007
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    Wow... This has so much emotion intertwined in it's words.. I thought it was beautiful...

  • Nanna B
    March 19, 2007

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    I am visiting everyones pages and looking at everyones writes from days long past, and WOW! You have grown so much as a writer in the past couple of months, and you should be proud of yourself, I know I am very proud of you. This is a fantastic write, most of your poems seem to be about love lost or love abused. If that is your inspiration then take it, it will definitely help you out alot in the future.

    Loves,
    --Nanners

    p.s. Josh is right, LOVE SUCKS!!!!!


  • saxophonicwolf
    January 25, 2007
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    love sucks. I feel your pain. Very vivid. I like how it ends!


  • Deminishing Light
    December 5, 2006

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    good!

    I really enjoyed reading this because it was claer and had vivid detail. A very good work all around!


  • lover not a fighter
    November 27, 2006
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    EXCELLENT

    THIS REMINDS ME OF MY EX!!!


  • zochit2me gold member
    November 24, 2006

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    I can relate

    This is a subject I can relate to. Love is blind and oftentimes we do not notice until we are cast off as if nothing...good write I really enjoyed it.
    ~Becky


  • Lyre-Bird-
    November 24, 2006
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    You have written a short write but you have expressed your emotions well..... I can relate to a broken heart, and relationship end....
    well done!!! your title is great... creates an instant image and fits well with your poem
    Tracey


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 24, 2006
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    Sentiments well expresed in these lines - easy to read and understand what you are conveying here. Good flow and short and to the point. Thought it was a good title you chose for this poem - lines all relate back to it.

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