To Catch a Falling Star by leo2 at All poetry

On falling star I made a wish

to one night be with you,

to dance the dance of moonlit dreams

and kiss as lovers do

One night alone is all I ask

with you there by my side

and then the heavens could rejoice

no stars would have to die

Oh fallen star, my fleeting friend

if you should come once more

Please make this wish a dream come true,

a night like none before

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Photo by heartnsoul

A contest entry

Poet Laureate of all AP for the year 2007 Contest # 87 at The Winkler by Andantino. 875 points, ended January 12, 2007, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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sarajaneUK
October 9, 2007

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OOO romance to the core! This is quite lovely Leo, good rhyme too, rolls very nicely off the tongue. Just can never get enough romance !!! nice one Janice
Star Shine
December 3, 2006

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Pure romance
Yes indeed I really like it, full of emotion, very wistful and wishful. I like the rhyme, classic style. Thanks for sharing this.
Sunshine Always
November 29, 2006

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Short but beautiful. If only all those wishes were to come true...I hope yours did......excellent...mal
Poetryintheblood
November 27, 2006
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Beautiful
Beautiful Leo, penned to romantic perfection Josephine.
heartnsoul
November 26, 2006

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I came by to take a star with me on vacation. I read this over again. Stared at the graphic and was genuinely pleased that I was able to create a grpahic that really does lend to the feel of a poem. I smile broadly! ..After reading again, I still feel the yearning with which you make a heartfelt plea. But I can't help but feel how this would be such a bittersweet moment. As always Leo, you do have a way of taking hold of the heart strings. See you when I get back!
~Michelle~
Intwine
November 26, 2006

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once again
you have delighted and inspired me. wonderful rythm and rhyme, beautiful meaning, really visual I saw scenes of lovers twinkling in the stars. wondefull as always.
Redstormy
November 26, 2006

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absolutely enchanting
Beautifully written, you have such a romantic heart
my friend.

" Oh fallen star, my fleeting friend" I swear those words are the story of my life. *smile
Crystal Decanter
November 25, 2006

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This is just lovely. The meter and rhyme are tight, an you manage it all without being trite. (haha just realized that rhymes) My fav. line: "to dance the dance of moonlit dreams/and kiss as lovers do" really captures the yearning of one who wants to experience what "lovers do" but feels he never might. And there I go again. I really didn't mean this to be a poem lol. I think I've read enough poetry for today ;-
myrataal
November 25, 2006

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Yearning for the Impossible
Impossible as suggested by the title (to catch a falling star), the wish is: NONE in intense love may ask for "one night alone" ... It is just NOT fair and possible to part after such a night. Yet: the sweet wish remains ... forever. And maybe it may become one thousand nights.

Beautifully written.

Love
Myra
- leo2
  November 25, 2006
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  If I ever catch that star........it will.
AALouisiana
November 24, 2006

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very well written as usual
I can tell this one is heartfelt, dear leo2. I really like the bold print..easy to read. Some folks' text in here is difficult to read because their backgrounds are obliterating the text.

The photo goes well with the text.

Keep on creating those heartfelt poems and I'll keep reading them.
trulymadlydeeply
November 24, 2006

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Beautiful
I came to return the favor of your visit. How beautiful!! Makes a heart literally swoon, and envious of the lady this wish is for. If the inspiration was from the recent shower of stars then wow.....you really are someone Iwant to read more of. However the inspiration came, it's a true pleasure to read. Very emotive!
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pattyann4500
November 24, 2006

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How lovely, Leo. A beautiful poem to go with such a beautiful picture. The poem is absolutely perfect. Hugs, Patricia
Bee gee
November 24, 2006

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A wish We all Wish would come true.
I really like the begining, it's exactaly what a person would do if they saw a Falling Star.I would if I was trying to get a one chance night with the one person i'd like to be with.My Emotinal response Once i Liked 2 very different Guys and wanted a dream night with them.I probaly wished all the time for my chance.I like the title, makes you wonder what the person could be saying about a Falling star.The last line i'd be saying the same thing.I don't have any suggestions and I like it as is.
EyeRaven
November 24, 2006

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VERY WORTHY
I will be reading more of your poetry sir, if you don't mind, form poetry strikes me at the heart, especially when weaved by the hands of a magician poet like you are..
JoyfulWriter
November 24, 2006

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A very beautiful piece here....full of longing and love...I so enjoyed reading this wondrous piece..smiles, Terry
EyeRaven
November 24, 2006

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*Shiver*
Oh remnants of demise and hate,
I crave you hereby not,
I'll trace a falling star above,
forsake the dying spot...

Ye star who's falling all in might,
Pour on me portion love,
A sample, in my thirsty nights,
and It would be enough..

Thank you for sharing such a heart-wrenching, heartfelt piece of art...

I liked your use of syllables here and there..
the second line in each stanza metred well with each other.
This was a wonderful Ballad..
Lyrical Ballads are one of my favourite all time poetry forms, you have earned my respect as a poet for using such faded, yet classical form.

well done, well done..
lyrical-rebel
November 24, 2006
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wow..!!! simple and sweet...!!! i usually dont like romantic poems cuz they seem to have more 'physical' aspects than the emotional... but this was jus the essence of innocence n love!!! i loved the utter simplicity n the image you've painted!!! Gr8 job!
ps: the pic adds to the perfect package!
The Perfect Moment
November 24, 2006
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sweet
such a sweet lovely poem. I loved it. it is so genuine and heartfelt. The words are simple but so emotional. This poem is short and sweet, but it greatly effects people. I wish you good fortune in all your ventures and that you keep writng!
Jersene
November 24, 2006
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Sigh...Beautifully written and full of heartfelt emotion. A joy to read!
heartnsoul
November 24, 2006

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tugs on the heart strings
One can't help but read this like a heartfelt prayer. A genuinely moving and tender write Leo. Leaving the reader wishing for you that all your wishes, dreams come true. You seem to out do yourself with each post. This flows like a slow dance, almost having to turn your eyes from it as it gives one the feeling of being the voyuer on a very private moment.
~Michelle~