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So much
                    unsaid
not done
                    so much
That I wish I had been

Beaten
                  Broken
          Smite thee down
On my knees, begging

Bleeding
                  crying
                          needing
                                            Dying




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  • Thayla
    February 13, 2008
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    Wow

    Very Deep!! Short and to the point. An emotional piece. Well written!!


  • serenity valley
    November 23, 2006

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    oh...that is so sad! i love the way you wrote this, the zig-zag typing thing (i don't know exactly what else to call it, the text styling or something i guess) expressed so much emotion. almost as if it were portraying the act of falling to your knees. very well done. i especially liked the "smite thee down" part; sad, but also different than the language we use today. again, great job.