Fat, chubby, fatso, gross, ugly
They said these things to you everyday
When you were walking down the street
Or doing the shopping, they would be there
Passing snide remarks, and smirking
When they saw you, curling their noses
When they passed you, and laughing later
When they left you.
The shop-assistant would sneer when he saw
The block of chocolate you had allowed yourself.
When you dropped your books on the curb
Nobody stopped to help, they walked on by.
Silently hostile and disapproving
Hailing a cab was hell
You didn’t understand, there must be
Something wrong with you.
You wanted them to like you, wanted the
Staring, leering, smirking and sneering to stop
So you tried to be like them; you went on diets
Starved yourself for days, learnt the trick
Of sticking your finger down your throat,
If you ate too much. Any energy you had
You used it on exercising and running.
And it was working.
You were losing weight, no longer were you
Fat, chubby, fatso, gross, or ugly.
For a time you thought you were almost like them,
Almost there, but one day, it started again.
The staring, the leering, the smirking and the sneering
But this time they weren’t laughing at your fat
They were laughing at your bones.
And they did it everyday.
When you were walking down the street
Or doing the shopping, they would be there
Passing snide remarks, and smirking
When they saw you, curling their noses
When they passed you, and laughing later
When they left you.
You didn’t understand, there must be
Something wrong with you.
You wanted them to like you, wanted the
Staring, leering, smirking and sneering to stop
It hurt so much, that eventually, you didn’t care
And learnt to love your body, be happy with your curves
Glad of your health, and you enjoyed living.
So when you went down the street, you smiled wide
And held your head high, a bright spark in a dull place
Not caring what you looked like, or what people thought.
And the staring, leering, smirking and sneering
Stopped.
A contest entry
- For Abused Youngsters by aslanlight.
450 points, ended March 31, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prejudice by vertigo beat.
525 points, ended April 4, 2007, 14 entries
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450 points, ended March 23, 2007, 15 entries
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600 points, ended April 3, 2007, 135 entries
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360 points, ended April 14, 2007, 116 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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thanks for entering and good luck.
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Great write that speaks to the reality of the world today. It is crisp and gets the message across with clarity and imagry. Thanks for this fine entry.
Bunny
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I swear I already commeted.
This is excellent, I love the truth and vulgarity of it.
This takes us from one extreme to the next, but I commend you on taking it back to the "normal" point. You're beautiful as you are, so long as you are healthy then it doesn't matter how much you wiegh.
Thanks for entering
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wooow >__
i liked your poetry..it really definitely made me feel something.that's how i usually feel..good luck
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I absolutely loved this!!
you're bad if you do and you're bad if you don't so might as well please yourself...I loved the message you have conveyed here...excellent piece!!
Jamila
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sad so very sad indeed to many people judge others by there looks ,i used to be young and pretty but i let myself go and i dont care what others think for i know god above made me and loves me for who i am
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you are such a gifted poet..keep it up. I love and adore this poem, and I think many if not all the readers before agree that this is a very beautiful and well written and a well crafted poem. I like the rhyme and I love the alliteration. This is simply spectacular. I applaud you and I salute you for it. This poem has great imagery, so much description and details. Its incredibly good. you have terrific potential. Peace to you always.
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Great
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Loved the expansiveness of this powerful piece of poetry you have so well alliterated for us all here at AP!!! Overall, this is a very provocative piece of well written material you have come with!!!!
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I love the message in this write. Be yourself, and LIKE yourself, then all else will fall into place.
I can't help wondering if this was written as a self-view or of someone close to you, or if it fiction. Whichever the case, the message touches on some very large problems in todays society.
Would all who have weight issues (too large or too small) read AND understand this, we'd have a much happier & healthier population.
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Emotionally Grabbbing
I was caught off-guard by this piece of literature. The constant repetition in section of the point really srives the central message of your poem. As well your poetic piece raises several important issues concerning obseity, diabetic , anexoria , boulima which are major problems that affects North American teens especially.
-A truely well rollercaster piece!
-Keep the ink flowing!
and good luck in the contest!
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omg this poem was AWESOME it sounds like its happened to you...has it?
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I think the content was good, I would dig more into the pain and then really releasing the acceptance part at the end, I would give a little more to the learning to be happy. I have a lot of people close to me that have suffered with this diesease and it's a little more than just not caring what others think. It truely is a journey in finding yourself, infact in many cases the pain like a scar lingers on an there is a constant fight. I would say this is a good start with a great idea.
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A Great Poem
This is a fantastic peice. So beautifully crafted. The repetition really works, and the diction is perfect. And I loved the positive ending, it made me smile. It's so true - to some people we are always wrong, and sometimes it's all in our minds. When we accept ourselves we'll be happier. A wonderful write. So great. -
Perfect
Whoa, that was awesome.
You absolutely nailed it.
It so true as well, quite sad isn't.
Keep it up its a fabulous write
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wonderful, and a little sad. I hater the fact that in life we are judged merely by our looks. The world is a very shallow place unfortunately, and I fear it is only getting worse. Thank you for so eloquently expressing the wrong in trying to shape ourselves into what the world wants us to be.
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True write....
This is a true write that brings a light to the reality of the nature of people in the day in which we live, in any day of time probaly. There's always someone or some group of people who will look down on you for any thing less of perfection in their eyes. But if they could only look to their true reflection in the mirror they would see much less than perfection in their own selves.
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I related this poem to a girl I watched get picked on at primary school...One day when we were lined up one of the other students made remarks about her weight...I was even more surprised when she turned to her and said " I'd rather be fat and happy, than skinny and miserable!" Her memory stayed with me always...I was so proud of her! It's good that you have learned this lesson...the structure flows with this poem and is plainly evident through the eyes of one that has been there. I applaud this piece. Quite sad.
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WOW
Society's so close minded in what they think normal should be! This poem speaks so much truth. I loved reading this, I'm glad this poem had a happy ending!
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All of your pain can be channeled into great poetry. You have a wonderful talent for this. I hope it relieves old feelings as you write and helps you to go on in life. Very raw emotions. Vivid imagery and smooth flow. This is a very personal write and I like the truth of it. No we can't run, but we can hold our heads high and face it head on. Never be the victim, be the survivor
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I think this is a beautiful poem and you ahve expressed the ignorance of society so well! I know how people can be like this as I am visually impaired. People can never be happy, society will never accept you as there is no normal really... So you might as well be yourself. Eventually when they see it doesn't bother you (as they do this cos it bothers you as they are insecure about themselves) they will normally stop. What's the point of doing something like that if the person doesn't even get upset? Well written and a good point put across. Well done and good luck in the contest!!
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great job!
there is not really much i can say about this. you figured it out. you had to like yourself, for yourself despite the 'everything'. and the everybody's. i think you 'got it'. (the answer) you like yourself. and that works... love GYPSYfish -
Great job!
I can see how it can be hard. We just have to become happy of who we are. Those who laugh and scoff are insecure themselves. This poem has a lot of soul in it and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck top gun. Thanks for sharing!
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oh my gosh! this could have been about me in my early 2os or about my daughter as a teen. this is an excellent poem and shows the cruelty of humanity if someone looks just a bit different. it also shows how one can be strong and be happy with their own body. you are very insightful. very talented. keep the ink flowing poet. God bless you
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wonderful
this is an amazing description of our society. The flaw that seems to be in so many human beings, the need to feel superior to someone else. I don't feel sorry for the ignorant, though I know I should. I feel bad for those chosen for one reason or another to be made fun of. You described it wonderfully. good job on this one.
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hi, this is really good, it's just sad how many people do have lives like this and sucuumb to anorexia, I hope it's not you you're writing about in this poem! If it is then I hope things are better for you! Anyway, great write and a good issue to write about, well done, have a nice day
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Very Good
This is what life is like sometimes. The ups and downs,we strive for the ups and dred the downs, So many people seem to have no heart when were down, no compassion,no time for us. We hope for better things and we do want them to like us, Next to the last line, This is what it's like for me these days, seems the older I get the less I care what people think, Any way tears and, smiles from your poem,, Very,, WELL DONE, Chris -
You have written such truth in this poem..... It doesn't matter what we are on the outside, but so hard when society, media torments us, for how we should look...
well done
you have made your message very clear
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Very good poem, I enjoyed reading it. Once I knew what it was about,I wanted to see how it progressed, so many of these types of poems/experiances don't end this way. Too many people do not know their self worth and go through life believing that they need to change themselves for everybody else. It's a shame really, there should be more people out there who appreciate themselves. Awesome read and if this was a personal struggle, I commend you, not many people figure out that the key to happiness is to just be happy with yourself.
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i really liked it... a piece about just loving yourself. very well done... i liked your use of repetition... it worked well. i enjoyed this alot
good piece
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true
this is... wow, i'm just speechless. You summed up society to a T. Great job on this.
jan
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you did a very good job on this poem.
i injoyed reading this because its so true. . ppl are so cruel and it seems like no matter what you do to fit in it never works. . theres allways something ppl are going to dislike and unaprove of you.
Very nice poem
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True
Its the confidence that shines from the inside out that is the gateway to others perception of you. I like the repetitiveness and the length good job
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