The gardener had the neighbors envy –
Vivid green foliage in his meadow
And every color the eye could see
Breath taking for anyone who passed –
All year long the scenery would last
The rose bush was his prize possession
Taking care of it well more than the others –
Even though his garden was like a brother
This one bad an unspeakable bond
No one could understand
His love for the rose
But they knew
He loved it so
Then one day the rose bush began to wither
The pedals down, the leaves brown
The neighbors envy turned to laughter
Because his love for the bush stayed true –
He did everything in his might to revive it to its old state
But not one red pedal came in sight
And he feared that the rose bush he deared –
Would never return
When hope seemed to be lost forever
A glorious red pedal appeared,
As fast as the rose bush had died
Its former beauty had returned –
The rose bush was fully revived
Once again the neighbors envy
The gardener appreciates its beauty
For he knows what he had almost lost –
And he will hold on now no matter what cost
Author notes
Opinion 1
a4) Write a poem about something beautiful becoming something beautiful.
A contest entry
- Weird Options Contest by Kimojuno.
456 points, ended July 12, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rings and Roses Bring your Prewrites! by Melodies.
550 points, ended October 4, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a beautiful piece. I liked the third and second last stanzas the best. The rose bush petals growing seemed metaphorical, like how in life people may feel as though all hope is lost until something happens in the future that gives them a sense of renewed hope in life. Congrats on the honorable trophy.
Haley Mary
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I liked the way you wrote this out!
And i truely enjoyed reading it...Beautiful pome!
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This was GORGEOUS
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Beautifully penned and sad... but LOVELY! 
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Lovely and poignant!
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Beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow!
Yes this was great, exactly what I wanted in this category, it was perfectly done and fit evenly. You did a great job with imagery, and I really enjoyed reading it, and as always please keep writing. This poem was great, I like how you wrote it too, I wasn't sure at first with the spacing but it really works - am I correct in assuming you're using the rose bush as a metaphor for humans? As in someone who was already pretty finding they are beautiful, even though others believe they are not. I may be reading into it, but in any case great job (perhaps a lover looking at the person *shrugs*). -
Wow..I hate to sound cliche..but this really is beautiful. Great job...thanks for sharing.
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Great write. I adore the loving bond that seems to stay with the gardener no matter what comes to happen to the bush. You have a gift.
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WOW this is just breathtaking and felt deep inside... i wihs you luckin the contest with this great write
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The words you write here are beautiful and the imagery is almost perfect. I can just about imagine it in my head like a movie. The topic of this poem is also a little bit of a favorite of mine. Roses such a simple flower but with a complex secret. How can such a small thing hold the beauty of heaven itself. (my opinion.) This poem is amazing and I loved it. Such a great write. You really are a talented poet.
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Fantastic!
This is beautiful. Almost prophetic. Yes many envy love when they look at it from afar, it takes much work and patience for love...true love to thrive!
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