In my backyard
you don't have to be colorblind
to see the roses
aren't red
or angry
to want to kick in the pumpkins
you don't even have to be hungry
to take a bite
of an apple that isn't yours
but you probably will be.
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I also forgot to tell you that i really really like this poem, and when i read it, i look at the message ur sending, rather than how you sent it...
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greg... I interpreted your poem to mean that when you want something like, "to see the roses are not red," or "to kick pumpkins," or "to take a bite of an apple that isn't yours," that in your backyard is where u don't have to be the very thing that makes you want that something, then that to mean that we all have a choice here, but then last, we choose to stay that way anyways... I like this poem because its hard to comprehend for me, and i may have misinterppretted it .but i still wanted u to see how I viewed your poem on first impression...chelsea
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Most motivations are only skin deep....but thank God for those who (like yourself) think a little outside the box and whose motivations are sparked by something more than mere survival and "status quo". Nice write, i enjoyed it.
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I do so agree...Interesting choices...
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I don't understand it at all!!!!!! I'm rereading it over and over but I would love for you to explain!
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this poem...
is an invitation for people to be themselves when they're around me... even if they do unexpected things... no, ESPECIALLY if they do unexpected things. It's supposed to subtly involve a metaphorical world, like a "garden in my mind" so to speak... a place where the things I think grow, evolve and ultimately... well, matter. The poem is about how depressing it is to me, when the people in real life behave conventionally predictable. This poem is trying to communicate the unimportance of doing things for "all the right reasons" and attempting to emphasize the value and appreciation I have for people who are interesting in their own right.
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in other words... (the non-visual version)
"In my backyard"
In a world according to me...
"you don't have to be colorblind
to see the roses
aren't red"
people have the power to see what isn't visible
"or angry
to want to kick in the pumpkins"
they live out loud, take no prisoners... and never apologize for or disguise their honest intentions and ideas
"you don't even have to be hungry
to take a bite
of an apple that isn't yours"
no matter how bizarre or politically incorrect they seem
"but you probably will be."
but this isn't my world, is it. And real people in real life... don't think this way, do they. Maybe motivations really are... only skin deep.
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your explanations make sense now, reading over. on first reading i was taking it more like you wanted people to see how appaling convention is, but that that you feel like the only person who sees it like you is you. explanation clears it up. really good imagery because it's not like patronizing at all. more like an invite into your "backyard".
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I really like this poem (surprised?)The last line just ties it all together. Good write.
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very good write ! i like it. short but it means alot more. happy thanksgiving bro.
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An interesting choice of words, which brings to mind that people, when reading this will see what they want to see, whatever it may be that is the "right reason" for them. I don't know if I am to get this impression, but I thought of this as a smaller part of a larger picture. I guess, not getting upset over spilled milk, as long as the milk was spilled because of a reason acceptable to an indiidual.
s and best wishes... ~Genie~
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