I know we've been separated a long time
but are we separate entities - we two?
sometimes I feel, I carry you inside
my skin, torn where words intrude
to constrict and gouge and remove my hide
you filet the wounds
-freshly healed,secret cave-dwellers of my mind.
We think and act and do
in separate worlds, each in kind
but bound by when, under an ancient lusty moon
we found love in each other's eyes.
& then, was it days, or months or years, - too soon
love lost became - juice of formaldehyde
yet still, why is it that I have to ask you
"Are we still one, or was our us a lie
and I - just a fool?"
Wishing there was an easy way to disconnect my I
from what was a sick, festering, used
twisted us - that logic defied
and any reason for joining exhumed
only ashes, any truth denied.
Any joy displaced, lost, presumed
beaten, relegated to forgotten blue skies
any clinging reticent thought, attributed to youth
and gently laid aside,
to rot in the cauldron of dreams and night gloom.
Why do I still fight
for something that never bloomed?
That never celebrated brilliant light
that withered, was it's self consumed
who's elasticity broke when pulled tight
& nothing was left but latent degenerated pride to carry
tune
or sing the music or keep alive
what I heard once as symphony? And you
never knew, never sought my mind
So that makes it easy for me to muse
our separation is real. What's left is you and I
alone, detached, just dust, no connection assumed
no reason to ask why.
Author notes
the see-saw if u & I refects the conflicting twisting emotions of memories bitter and sweet fighting for dominance with acceptance of separation a cold conclusion. //this poem expresses torn, twisted, unresolved, feelings which opposed each other at every turn, bloom or gloom? was it symphony or festering & twisted? In the end the negative seems to win out and the melencholy linger as the author absorbs loss.
A contest entry
- Losing her/him by Atrophya.
400 points, ended December 22, 2006, 35 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contradictory by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended November 13, 2007, 18 entries
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Thanks for entering.
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wow, this was a great poem
It was....strong, lol, that's the only way I could put it, direct in displaying the hurt and beautiful in the sense of the poem.
very well done.
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Nice!!I loved it!!Beautiful!!Great write, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!!
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this is a good piece of poetry i find which you have written here with some style, it holds a nice gentle rhythm to the poem and the flow is very niceindeed. i thank you very much indeed for sharing your poetic talent. i wish that you have good luck in the contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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is this where the first 2 lines of the poem go? I am not sure what i am supposed to put here. I filled in the author comment? does that go here again? sorry - I am new at this
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