Unfurl the sheet,
Raise thy colors,
And set my course onward,
Through the sea,
My new lover!
The waves crash,
The wake behind,
A new start for all!
Sun is high,
Spirits soaring,
The wind is blowing,
And the sky is smiling!
We bring out our cry of Joy,
Huzzah!
Author notes
Short about sailing, not the best, but i needed something new.
Please tell me what you think
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this is good...an excellent flow with a classic feel and imagery...well done, thanks
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love it
I love it alot!
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lol this one was funny
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I love your wording and just pretty much how you're giving this image of happiness.
My favorite lines are: "The wind is blowing,
And the sky is smiling!"
Also, I love the ending huzzah.
As usual great job.
I alway love your poems.
::hug::
Mia.
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Awesome, Sailor
A sailor through and through, huh? Love the imagery here, Niisan. I never knew that a "smiling sky" could ever sound so pretty.
~Britti
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I really like the imagery you used. I think the wording is (for lack of a better word) vague enough that for someone reading the poem, it can relate to a bunch of different topics. The structure was dead on and you added excellent animation to the piece to make it very enjoyable to read. Outstanding work.
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