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Thanks anyways

Broken body, broken mind
torn apart by troubles and time
Feeling ill, as the world spins
feeling like I’m walking on pins
heart breaking, beat slowing
Time killing, blood spilling
feeling the pain rush through my vain
screaming in pain as it all washing down the drain
stomach clenches, heart retches
falling to the floor, as I hear someone say hor
the lies they spread, the tears I’ve shead
for nothing more then to hear the words hor
I did nothing wrong I said nothing bad
but still they haunt me taunt me with dread
killing my world with words so dead
my pain is real ,  why can’t they see
that their words are slowly breaking me
killing me from the inside out
smothering me until I can’t even shout

destroying my soul, and burning me whole
the pain is still there , even in death
those dreaded words , still cost me my breath
gasping for air, falling to death
they took my love and my life
My heart slows as I take my last breath
please someone help me
help me please
or are you just going to leave
can’t you see I’m in pain
can’t you see my life is down the drain

finally you help me , finally you see
but its to late, its to late for me
those words are stuck , jammed in my head
ringing back in forth
even though I’m dead
but thanks for trying , thanks for finally caring
but it took you too long
my heart finally tore
and now I’m dead , stuck in the ground
but thanks anyways
even though it took you so long
I appreciate you trying

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This is a poem I wrote out of no where.. I have no clue what it means.. and I know the title doesn't go well.. and I'm sorry for that too

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  • Poetic-Dreamer
    November 22, 2006

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    What's hor??? I'm alittle lost with that. I liked how you told it like a story from the start middle then the end and I like how you don't point fingers blaming people and you thank them for atleast trying in the end. I think you no what it means becuase we all try we all become fake and talking to you has proven your alot like I was when I was your age and thats how I felt. You try to get them to notice to help you but they don't and your looking ahead to when you finaly do break and they never did help and they relise they should have. Nice work

    NoL