As thunder struck, the rain came down,
And lightning flashed nearby
That, along with driving winds,
Was like anger from the sky
The ocean seemed of the same intent
As swells began to roar
And massive waves of raging surf
Came crashing on the shore
Clouds in the darkened sky would glow
As flares of light flashed through
And through it all the thunder roared,
Like a messenger of doom
The fury seems to deepen
As the minutes tick away
Until the passage of the storm,
I'll sit inside and wait
~ greg ~
Author notes
This came to me while standing on the back porch watching a massive thunderstorm roll through.
*I wrote this last year but a similar storm the other night reminded me of it so I thought I'd throw it out here.*
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Bravo
great imagery here. very nice flow. you have carried the intensity of the storm through to the page quite nicely. and still able to show it as something beautiful, even if somewhat destructive. good job on this and thank you for sharing with us. -
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Thanks,
Yes, the storm was pretty intense, and I love thunderstorms anyway so the descriptions came easily.
I had just gotten home as it started so I was glad to be watching it from inside. -chuckle-
Thanks for the comment.
~Greg~
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I loved the last line in relation to the rest of the poem. As I was reading it, I had this vision of being tossed around by the wind and rain, and then to come across that final line, I had to laugh just a bit . . . definitely much more pleasant to observe such fury from behind glass! Loved your imagery, and your rhythm and flow were excellent as well.
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Thanks Carrie!
I did that on purpose, but your the only one who mentioned it in a comment. I think that's kinda funny. We seem to think alike sometimes.
It was a good storm, I like thunderstorms, so the thoughts came easily on this one.
Thank you for the comment!
~Greg~
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I adore storms. I have never been known to ignore thunder and lightening or to cower from the pounding of rain and the scratching of tree limbs. I find something close to ecstasy pumped into me at the same beat the rain beats the ground. -Sigh, I love it, if you can't tell.
As for this write, your descriptions are accurate and I loved watching this storm from your point of view. Great job.
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Thanks Shirley, (I hope I remembered right!)
I love thunderstorms too, and this was a big one. It was awesome.
The thoughts for the poem seemed to come out without really thinking about them. They were just there.
Which doesn't happen very often. -chuckles-
Thanks for the comment!
~Greg~
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hmm I like this it was very different from the other storm poems I read seemed more discriptive this was very well written your creativity shines through its unique and well thought out I like this very much I can picture it easily and I like that in a piece of writting
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Thanks,
Yeah, it was a pretty big storm, so it wasn't hard to be descriptive. Plus I like storms anyway.
Thanks for the comment!
~Greg~
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Good job Greg
I usually see storms like these through the windshield of my cab. Their power is immense and no time to be practicing your iron shots on the golf course.
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No, definitely not a good time to be driving. On the course or in a cab.
Especially not a good time for the person waiting for a cab on the side of the road. I know that feeling. -chuckles-
Thanks,
~Greg~
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I like your rhyming and I like the storm,very discriptive,the second stanza brings the ocean and sky in fury together.
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Thanks Ronn,
Yeah, it was pretty intense. It was fun to watch from the safety of cover though. -chuckle-
~Greg~
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this is really good. i love it. well done. x
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Wow this really does sound like the storm is pissed. like if the lighting was punishing the people, like some sourt of zeus throwing lighting at his people. So where are you from? I wonder if would ever get used to lighting... I like lighting but it can be a little scary. Well done.
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Thanks!
Yeah, it was kinda nasty.
I live on the oceanfront in Va Beach, Va.
And yeah, it was kinda scary till I got home and was watching it through the window. -chuckles- ~ greg ~
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