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Touch The Moon

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Touch the moon,

and feel it’s warmth as

cushioned emotions come sweeping past;

Dark shadows lurk across the

horizon, with fingers grasping for frayed edges…nibbling

at confidence, destroying

hope... but this glow of moondust, holds the sanity of the day

into place;

Moon beams snake across this

brow of sadness, lightening the

ashes of gloom to a silver bowl of thoughts;

Drowning in the sphere of helplessness,

flinging out a

silent plea.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • xstarvingartist
    May 17, 2007
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    J'ai vraiment apprécié lire votre poème.
    C'était très mélancolique,
    et l'écoulement des mots,
    quand lire ou dit,
    coulez très lisses et gentiment.
    bon emploi!

    -Eli

    [english]

    I really enjoyed reading your poem.
    It was very melancholy,
    and the flow of the words,
    when read or said,
    flow very smooth and nicely.
    good job!

    -Eli


    • cutiepie gold member
      May 17, 2007
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      Thank you Eli, for your kind comments, beautifully translated There is something about French language that I find very soothing. Thank you


  • BlackBlackHeart
    May 16, 2007
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    beautiful interpretation of the moons lonleyness and beauty.. well done keep up the good wrighting

  • skaldkraft
    May 16, 2007
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    Well expressed emotion

    Good read. The flow was great. Your description of emotion made me feel it. Your expression was wonderfully dark. The words within your piece almost form a circle, a shape reflecting your subject the moon--excellent idea. Keep writing. Try publishing.


    • cutiepie gold member
      May 17, 2007
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      Glad you enjoyed this poem Many thanks for the kind comments


  • Takunaki
    May 16, 2007

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    Great piece you have here. I really enjoyed reading this. Such great imagery and word choice. The flow is excellent as well. Very nice job. Keep up the great work =]


  • Angels Delight
    May 16, 2007

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    Excellent Piece

    I really loved the image you created and it had a sad feeling to it...I truly enjoyed reading this piece and I can understand your words on such a personal level...

    So thank you very much for sharing this

    Much Love
    Tessa


  • Jalalbad gold member
    May 15, 2007
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    a beautiful picture

    and a lovely little write. smile always.

  • ohdavey2008
    December 13, 2006

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    good poem







  • x Bright Eyes x
    December 13, 2006
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    very good

    hi i thought your poem was really good and was enjoyable to read and it was well written


  • W B Burkholder
    December 12, 2006

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    well written with a poetic flow and rythym very nicley done. "moondust holds the sanity.... really cool wriet thanks for sharing


    • cutiepie gold member
      December 12, 2006
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      I am delighted that you enjoyed this poem, many thanks for your kindness and comments


  • fromzerotonothing
    December 12, 2006

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    wow thats really good...i love all the imagery and it flowed really well all the way through ... great jo


  • Pink Absinthe
    December 12, 2006

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    Hmmmm...
    I like how this is a dark write, not nessecarily sad or negative but it's grey its very well portrayed. A short piece, that does exactly what it needs to do. A great image, of touching the moon; I've not heard of such a poem. This conves feelings, which we will probably never feel, but in your poem it becomes perfecetly real like we do it anyway. This write relates a lot to the feelingof the Moon tarot card, which is a difficult aspect to both perceive or desire.
    Well done this is avery good write!


    • cutiepie gold member
      December 12, 2006
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      Many thanks for your kindess in pointing out the error... has not been edited


    • cutiepie gold member
      December 12, 2006
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      Many thanks for your kind comments, as always very much appreciated


  • Nanette
    December 12, 2006

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    Beautiful!

    This is really a beautiful write with such amazing images. Love the style / format. Your words seem to leave me with quite a tranquil feeling.  You've done well here. You are obviously a great poet.  A suggestion:  Line 5: Graspingfor (space required)

     

    Cool


  • Providence
    December 12, 2006

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    Beautiful. This rising full moon has lifted many a saddened heart. Great imagery nice floe and I just loved the picture!

    Marianne


  • Iohagh
    November 25, 2006
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    You took me and left me there

    Darling

    A third acts play
    does not point away
    summarizes what you say
    never leaving conclusions gray.

    I suppose feeling blue
    cannot teach me more
    pain in itself true
    needs summary, I implore.

    Smoosh

    Janet

    • cutiepie gold member
      November 26, 2006
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      A summary....yes, there could be a conclusion perhaps but I do love leaving the reader wondering Thank you Janet for your comments, poetry themselves


  • Dreamer With Dreams silver member
    November 23, 2006

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    Wonderful!

    Twas' a lovely write. I quite enjoyed it. I liked the wording that you used. The words were quite colorful. I could honestly relate to your poem. Good job!

    Safely hidden in the darkness,

    ~ The Rocker who lost all aka Sacred Shadows


    • cutiepie gold member
      November 25, 2006

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      Thank you for your kindness Delighted that you enjoyed it

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