Sunrise.
Colors streak the sky.
Baby pink, gold like the leaves of autumn.
Blue like the robin's egg; blue like the bottom of the sea.
Clouds surround, outlined in hot pink, vibrant; ready for this day.
There is white like new snow; purple fit for a king's robes.
The sun peeks over the horizon, and I realize;
It is not the sunrise. It is simply the hope found deep in your eyes.
Author notes
This was written on a rock in the middle of a creek. It was awesome.
A contest entry
- Lauren is 14, at last! {Happy birthday to me} by Lauren Noir.
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Comments, questions....I'd love to hear 'em!
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Your Use of color
brought home even more the true beauty contained within a sunrise. Wonderfullu Penned! thank You!
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Beautiful
Just beautiful
I could feel that I was sitting on the rock soaking up the beautiful sunrise
Well done
Thank you for entering
And goooood luck
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good Good
Very appealing is this verse. I have never noticed the "baby pink" in the sunrise. I like to see God's actions daily and feel awful to have never picked this color out yet reading this realizing i have seen it. However pink isn't the new red to my masculinity.
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Aww...the baby pink's one of my favorites! God put a lot of colors in the rainbow...but he never blended and intermingled them as well as he did in the sunrise.
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Wow! Very well done. Great use of colours, displaying imagery, and analogies! Really enjoyed reading this. My personally favorite time of day is watching the sunrise, so you've struck home in my heart. Just one or two suggestions:
I don't think Robin is capitalised.. prove me wrong but just check on that. And in the same line you might even want to take out the "..and.." before "..and blue like the bottom of the sea..", may add some depth. Thanks for sharing!
Andrew
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One of the best
Wonderful use of words, every line is so pretty, I think this poem would sit well with some of the greatest poets of all time, I'm not over reacting to get points, You can keep the points , I love this poem, Chris -
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Shoot...now I'm going to go and get an ego! Thanks, though...glad you liked it so much. (My other poem, "Sunshine," isn't as poetic...but you might find it sweet!)
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