Nazi swastika
on condemned church building
paint dried while running
Author notes
The things you can see while driving.
A contest entry
- Eyes by BabyBun.
450 points, ended June 19, 2008, 36 entries
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Short, poignant and powerful!!!!
This poem is exquisite! I appreciate the haiku (senyru) form. "Nazi swastika on condemned church building, paint dried while running"; this line is fabulous. I enjoy your use of imagery and descriptive adjectives. Well done!!!
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Wow. Definitely interesting, what one can see...and make others envision(sp?). Great job.
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I like this a lot
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hmm .. the last line is very interesting ..
You must have had inspiration running for you when you were driving. Can you teach me [how to drive] so I can gain such inspiration and write as good as this?
All the best and keep writing
Never ♥
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chanced on it, since you visited me, and though i ain’t one for short poetry, it... hit me like a sledgehammer. guess it all lies in the choice of words, subject, impact, surprise – all blended here into one powerful hit to the solar plexus. maybe also because i am jewish and carry that “unique gene” so sensitive to this subject. you tell a huge story about liberty, abuse, hate, cowardice, all in a few words. great.
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I like it
As a short, good choice of immediate words, very powerful words. I like this, not least becuase you have chosen your words very well, economic, but hard hitting.
This is a very good piece, quite upfront, deserves far more reads and hopefully it will get those.
James
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good job
This is the land of the free and home of the brave. All sorts are free here. Isn`t that grand? Thanks for sharing. 
Jules.
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