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A pure white kitty
Trapped in a world of the possessed
Kills the unwilling
Making all those suffer who do not
bow down
He thinks to himself
And if I ever need someone I would
come apart at the seems
His paws drenched in gooey blood
His possessor hangs on his tail
Who is going to comfort the little
kitty to keep him strong
He can’t resist the edge to kill
His eyes are turning solid black
His surroundings are turning red
He’s never felt this empty
He yells at his tormentor and says
NOBODY KNOWS WHO I AM
I have lost my true love
I have lost my sense of reality
I’ll be stained forever with this
gooey blood
He’ll never be left alone
The tormented kitty kills the last
thing he would
He is free from the possessed
world he was trapped in
Author notes
-you will go... Number 3!-
(RON PAUL STARE 8-|)
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makes me think of the show dexter, specifically when he tells another serial killer, "you know, i understand, i can't help myself either" and then he kills him
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This has more than great description and feeling, plus a good flow
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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What is the picture.I got a guess, but I don't know. is it the kitty with the riffle???
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Nifty
i love htis. it is so dark (as was the point apparently). good job it made me think... -
fantastic
this is a great piece, love the picture as well, very good choice
keep up the great work!!
wolf
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awsome
awsome piece fits the pic well only a few minor changes that i see the line And if I ever need someone I would
come apart at the seems
between someone and i try an elipse ... to break the structured feel and give kitty more of a sense of despair
also try to center this poem in the page the placement would actually make it a bit stronger other than that i enjoyed it a lot
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