Mister, please
I’m far too young
Far too naïve
For games like this
Your hand is rather close
Rather near my thigh
Isn’t, mister?
Sir, you’re so funny
So funny when you joke
About things I don’t understand
It’s fun when you
Tickle me
But maybe
too fun for you
Do you want a hatchet, sir?
The kind with an
Extra-sharp blade?
The kind that slices through
A head
Like a flesh colored melon?
It would be so
Fulfilling, sir
So fulfilling to have you
Inside me
And so arousing too
If you would take along my soul
When you
Pull out from below
Do you want that, mister?
Do you want a trip inside me?
You say so with your eyes,
Like you always do
You’ll ravish me won’t you, sir?
Ravish me until I die.
Hurrah! Complete nonsense! Horrah!
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I want to be in your crisper, and I certainly want to take a trip inside you
. I don't think this sucks, I like it actually. I really like your attitude when you write, it is rather perverse and on the crazy side, me likey!
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Interesting write.
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Poetry???
It reads more like prose. It's sort of a conversational rant, but I don't think it even qualifies for free verse or blank verse. You haven't really used any poetic devices besides line breaks here. Shouldn't poetry elevate your ideas in some manner that prose doesn't? If not, then are all the world's novels poetry?! Just a thought! -
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Well I don't see how it is a rant at all, and what is written is not exactly what is meant. I write prose, so I wouldn't consider poetry my strong point--still, I would also not consider this prose. lol
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This is definately an intersting read, I have a hatchet if you want to borrow it, just clean it before you give it back, I get queezy at the sight of blood lol, this sure was different, although what did I expect when I click on a title names I store my lovers in the crisper. Great job here, got me thinking, no not about using the hatchet... geez LOL
Great job
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Thanks so much.
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haha you loser.
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