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Understanding the Cold
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Rain eats away the paint.
Rolled streaks
of stone beneath;
taste of lead welled
in run-offs concaved
from a million
plops
gray blankets a chance
of sun's merry wink,
motioning in the dank
that stains
fray of jeans
that drag under boot heels-
fluttered white catches
attention,
wind playing a game
with litter
that no-one picks up
once the air
dips below 50 degrees
and haunts once more
slink out from the shadows
to add clatter
to teeth clenched
from the cold--
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Author notes
You know, I've never had so many problems trying to write something simple. This place keeps crowding me, not allowing for breathing (or writing) room.
Ah. Such is life in the land of Kevin. We shall bow to his will, or break (away and leave)...
A contest entry
- wall poetry- by -ButterflyCuts-.
300 points, ended December 2, 2006, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Yeah, this was started before the upgrade, too
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wow, weird. I just logged in and was somehow you, with all your comments showing in my notes. I see we are in the same contest together and that you are getting a more than enthusiastic reception here! All the best.
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Great images you've painted with your words, especially the third stanza...could see the litter swirling around in the wind. And your so right, no one picks it up once Jack Frost comes to nip. Well done!
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Another thought provoking write, I love the way this began with the rain, and ends on the snow.
Clatter of teeth was a great choice of words instead of the cliched chatter!
A definite waller..lol.
I'm not sure about the title, but that's just my opinion.
Great entry!
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Thank you.
Which title? The AP title isn't the real title (Understanding the Cold is)... I've decided to mask my pieces a bit so that they aren't so easily found.
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LOL.. why??
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So, if I decide to send it to a publisher, it doesn't show up as quickly should they decide to google it...
and I'm using the AP titles as collections and such.
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Oooh.. haha! I thought you meant for us.. in respnse to the upgrade or something
I mean.. yea, makes more sense now lol. x
Why don't you not use the titles on AP full stop?
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MELI!!! Never thought I'd see you here
YAY
That final stanza is simply gorgeous.. wow. Lovely piece, a definite wally
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amazing~
So amazing, powerful and real
You always bring a strong dose of reality in a beautiful way....
Always in awe of your talent...
Lynda
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Aw. Thank you.
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no way
it didnt work
wtf
I cant even make faces right anymore.. -
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The K Man took away the jerk off guy.
It was the greatest thing about the upgrade. 
(have you replied to one person in your comments, scroll down to comment on another and the posted comment follows you down there? Holy Hell! What's going on? Not another glitch, Batman!
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dang we cant even copy and paste him either..
sniffles..
just wrong.. shaking head
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*whatever* on with the jack dude.. cracking up..
You rock you rebel child you..
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