Love is a beautiful feeling
It resurrects one from dying
So live it, breath it
But die, don’t ever let it
For if it does die out
We would be nothing
But a walking cadaver
Without any spirit
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So true, so true.
So full of meaning and truth. It's an amazing poem. I loved it. Honestly it's one of my favourites so far. Where did you get this idea for your poem? It's fanominal(hope I spelled it right! Good job, and keep it up! If you know what yoga-ish means would you mind telling me cuz I have no clue
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Here here. This was so true. This one line threw me off though and I had to read it over,
"But die, don’t ever let it"
Sound a little Yoda-ish.
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Thanks Frodofan
I love your comment, its very special like you. I know, that line was just for a little twist to keep the flow. But call me dumb, what is Yoda-ish? Otherwise I really appreciate your time.
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This is really quite a cute poem - funny ending - yet so true. Easy to read and understand. Has a good flow to the lines and is short and to the point. Wondering if there is another word for die - as you have used that line twice in two lines - would be good to use death or some other similar word here instead - just a suggestion.
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Thanks a million!
Thanks for being the first one to enjoy reading it and write a beautiful encouraging comment. Like always I admire and long for the respect from a great artist like you. Thanks again for your time.
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