I am from an orphanage, adopted into loving hearts.
Given more opportunities than whats taken advantage of.
Trestles of care and nails of love assembling a family;
Even as their blood. does not pulse through these veins.
I am from orange juice "slip & slides" and pencils in the toaster.
To cold ice arenas and leotards;
Olympic dreams to bare a bright future...
Life planned out at an early age.
I am from "there's always an excuse" and "just say no!"...,
To "if you shouldn't do it, I can teach you how."
--"You...what?!", in freak of hysteria, my fault again...
Raged in a rebellious, impulsive temper.
I am from state gymnastic competitions and pedal stools.
To suspension slips and house calls.
Crafted bracelets, sewing machines, sketches, and canvas--
My "anti-drug" and coping skill for solitude.
I am from annual 4 hour drives & holidays on the shore.
A bite into salt water taffy could bring back years of memory.
I am from "right
to
left" literature and Mediterranean cuisine; such beauty!
To roommates and a structured schedule, not by choice.
I am from expression in oneself, artistically...
and share the emotions that one can get from written words.
I am from kindergarden, never wanting to move to grade school.
To pleasure is pain & pain is pleasure and love is all the same.
I am here, pathing my own path, and doing things my way.
I have gone through too much to just give up now.
Dreams I once had, I rebuild in hopes of making it reality.
Life isn't as sadistic as I use to think it was.
Author notes
guidelines i had follow...
and starting every stanza with "I am from"
1st stanza: family
2nd stanza: childhood
3rd stanza: quotations
4th stanza: what you've done
5th stanza: where you've been
6th stanza: emotions
7th stanza: present
this poem isnt done and not edited yet so...go easy.
so haha it took alot to make this poem "hopeful" a cover up for my school...so they dont think im like sad or something...
SO I LOVE LIFE
yippydeedoda!
lol
A contest entry
- If You Want Comments... by RT michaels.
335 points, ended February 13, 2007, 106 entries
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[[I am from "there's always an excuse" and "just say no!"...,
To "if you shouldn't do it, I can teach you how."
--"You...what?!", in freak of hysteria, my fault again...
Raged in a rebellious, impulsive temper.]]
-excellent lines, especially these ones. also, great piece. kind of messed up on some vicodin ((bad tooth ache)) so i can't really leave as good of a comment as i would like. have a good day. also, your school gets on your poetry site?? that's a little odd.
-lys
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Heya hun! It's been a while since we've talked! How are you doing? I've been mad bussy and running around like a crazy chicken with its head cut off lol..but i saw this was a poem you were focusing on so i tought i would read it and i enjoyed reading this..you are so talented and your work never ceases to amaze me! keep it up..your talented. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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of the guidelines that you had to follow, you stuck to them very well. You show an amazing transition from one time to another as if broken thoughts of yourself on the path that you are on. Also, i thought the authors note that you left was hysterical. yippydeedoda, indeed. Thank you for your entry.
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i would love to read this and give an honest opinion but sadly, the background and colors made it almost painful to read. If you change this I would love to knwo so that i can review it and give an honest coment on the work -
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sorry
bout that...here you go...now its easy to read
♥ Lynn
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I found this a tad bit hard to follow I guess because the polka dots crossed my eyes... lol , but I did finally get it all soaked in and found it to be full of twists and turns... dark and deep in with painful memories and maybe even a bit of resentment... and who could blame you... It is raw in emotion and that is what captures the attention of the reader! Thanks for sharing the depths of your soul and my best to you!
Frogz~ -
Maybe its just because my computer's fucked up but there are only three stanzas in this poem and your authors comments explains seven? I don't know...?
I thought this was an amazing poem. I loved how you burned innocence in the last stanza, burned it like nicoteen in a cigarette. I could relate to it a lot in some ways... kind of hard to explain though.
You've done well sweetie
Much love
always && forever,
~Kendal
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lol girly
yeah i havent finished the piece yet...i said it someone on here...eyes must of skipped it
i think it will get better and more dark as it goes along
thanks girly for your comments!!!
love you my midnight shooting star in marshmellow smoke clouds
(well i tried...your much sweeter
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xoxoxo
muwh!!
♥ Lynn
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hmm,i think i know both of these people...?
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I liked this...it had a sincere innocence to it thats rather hard to find now a days...very good and well written but i think you could put more feeling into this peice to really really make it shine! I like the title for sure...that definatly interested me and made me want to click on this particular peice...Overall...good writing with potential to be outstanding! Good job!
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