I can truly say I love you
From the bottom of my heart
But you left my heart so black and
That's the coldest, darkest part
And now nothing feels alive there
Not a flicker or a spark
Well, it hurts to have to say this
But I know it must be said
These scars inside will never heal
Until all between us ends
'Cause everything is dead and black
Where at one time all was red
I don't ever want to see you
I sever ties once held dear
The only way to cover up
Everything destroyed in here
But time can heal when I'm alone
Or devour me in my fear
And I know sometimes I'll miss you
And dream of you late at night
When we're no longer even friends
And my thoughts begin to bite
But scars will heal, memories fade
Then ties can be set back right
I know this may seem cold to you
But it's become my last way
To heal these wounds you've left with me
And I hope you hear me say
As numbness starts to take control
I lose what I had once made
I've always loved you, always will
And true love can never fade
Author notes
This is probably one of my best writes I've ever done. It is one of the most emotional and I suppose that is what makes it one of my best. I sometimes don't like to read it because I never want to hurt the way I did when I wrote this, and it only reminds me of what love can do to a person.
I do not regret breaking the ties I speak of in this write, because doing so helped me find at least a small piece of happiness in a world that is so dark, cold, bitter, and hurtful. Even though I tried so hard to nevermore let myself feel that way, I've fallen in love with someone again. She means everything to me, and the only thing that could even come close to her is my other love, my music.
Anyway, reading this reminds me that nothing is forever and love and hate are not so different after all, and that's what really scares me the most when I read this. I hate knowing I'm right about this.
Also, on another note, the person who I severed the ties with has finally admitted to at least liking me and has said that they left me for my own good. Sure ... because I love to feel this way, being scarred for life is exactly the way I've always wanted to live. And now they come back to me ... and do you know what I told them ...
... nothing at first .... I laughed for about 2 minutes Then, I said "FUCK YOU" and laughed some more. Lastly I walked away, still laughing. (Though she'll always have a place in my heart, I'll never give her another chance to break ... no, trample on my heart.)
I now have a wonderful girlfriend who I hope with all my heart loves me back. I want us to last forever but like my mother used to tell me "Hopes and dreams can get you a hand full of shit ... but that's about it."
Maybe that's why I'm so pessimistic ...?
Please tell me how you think I can improve this.
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Wow....This is...Amazing. in so many exotic ways. it just leaves me breathless. also reminds me of my past memories. sigh.. well you are quite the poet. great write. perfectly writen. (:
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GREAT
I must confess you will never know what great you done here to pour out such a heavy load and helping other get free I know now you are stronger cos the burning pain inside kills the soul now it is out the soul is free. No matter what has happend the best is coming right at you.so listen to the music of your heart and take the gift that each day brings no matter what it may be good work thank you.
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I know how you feel,
I've had similar pain,
it seems the only way,
that you can be sane.
Though I have learned,
not to cut those ties,
it might seem crazy,
but these are not lies.
Please listen to me,
and keep a friend,
they may comfort you,
In the end.
Sorry about the poem, I was thinking of a response and started rhyming and yeah. Good poem, it has nice structure, I liked the way the last stanza was two lines longer. -
...Hard to describe, but I like it
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I think everyone can relate to this on e. Where theres someone you love, but don't treat you as well as you should be. Turning your heart so cold.. I especially like the last lines "I've always loved you, always will and true love can never fade" which i completely agree with
I also liked the scheme of it, and the way the stanzas were broken up. Very good peice.
Keep up the good work
Love, Kaylyn
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i think that this a good dark piece of poetry which you have written here with somw style, it is an enjoyable dark poem, and it has a good flow to it. thank you for sharing your poetical talent with us all here at allpoetry, i enjoyed reading it with my eyes. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Very sad. You got your message across very clearly. Gah! So so sad! I just wanna give you a hug...
Excellent choices with the background and format of the poem as well. Beautiful write!
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oh god. this fits my life perfectly right now. I love it
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I cried
I feel your pain, I had the same thing happen to me, you hang in there and everything will be ok.
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This poem is so sad... what's worse, I know exactly how you feel; I'm trying (and failing) to do the same thing. 'Tis a great poem you've got here. Hope things work out for you.
Best wishes
- Reiyn
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OMG! i love that poem. you did such a wonderfull job. It almost sounds like the situation i'm in right now. Thanks.
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