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The Passion Of Death

The images sucked into night
The air is so sweet and crisp
My mind half there
I see you
Your golden bronze body
Walking towards me
Wearing only the candle light and a smile
My body shivers at your nearness
Anticipate your touch along my body


You see the desire in my eyes
My nipples turned to peaks
The wetness of my passion
Linging between my thighs
The wind whispers your name
Over and over calling out to me

Your beautiful
Your movements graceful
Your like a work of poetry
Still you come near
Finally your here

Yes, I think
Your hands are finally on me
I'm losing my control
My moans are the song
That you like to hear

My whimpering is the sign
Of my passion and desire for you
Your hands
Your hot, wet kisses
Consuming me
Your killing me softly

Your hands explore my whole body
Were it curves, where it lies flat
Over my breasts
To my stomach
Between to my wet heat

Your long fingers
Exploring me
Teasing me
Tauting me
I cry against your open mouth

Feeling the wetness
Trickling down your hand
You don't stop there
No, you contiune your sweet assault on my body
Kissing every inch
Stopping once again between my thighs

Your kisses here are way too much for me
Tasting my love juice
Drinking the honey sweetness here
Curving your tonuge spelling
L-O-V-E 
The pleasure so great
I want to scream
And I do

I climax on your beautiful face
Pulling you closer to my hungry lips
Those silky black locks
Between my fingers
Your lips feel subline against mine
Tasting my passion upon your lips

Those same hands that give me pleasure
Close tightly around my neck
Squeezing the life out of me
My eyes bug out
My thoat cut off of oxygen
The black marks appears upon my neck

Slowly I'm dying
Only to lay lifelessly upon my bed
My body reminds naked to share my shame to the world
You leave without some much as a kiss
Only to leave me like a whore

But, I guess a was your whore
I gave it up didn't, I?
So I paid the price
Too bad I was my life

THE PASSSION OF DEATH!!!!!!!!

Author notes

This is based on a crazy dream I had last night about a man who made love to three women and killed them in the process but, I turned out to be those women being killed over and over by the passion of death. I hope you enjoy it!


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  • cali951
    June 16, 2007

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    Wow that must have been a crazy dream because it was a crazy story being fucked so good than being killed thats crazy but its different and I like it..........


  • loveaswellashate
    May 29, 2007

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    this was really good i liked it.. weird dream i must say though.. thanx for joinin and good luck in my contest...
    Laters
    Loves...*hugs*


  • HerbalGoat
    May 21, 2007

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    Interesting dream. I do like erotic poetry, but writing blatantly about what is going on takes away from the mood. Sometimes being overly detailed is not pleasing. Also, you are very repetitious, and though this is based off of a dream where the repitions may have taken place, poetically it is not pleasing. When basing poetry off of another source, one does not need to write about it in scrutiating detail. I liked your first stanza because it was not too detailed, though there was enough details present to create the mood. Though full of anger and sort of sad, I liked your ending. I did not, however, like how you abruptly transitioned into it.


  • bird-mad girl
    May 18, 2007

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    Interesting dream. I like how you told it through a poem. Though I think it would have been better if you repeated it with the three women. I think that would have given it the sinister side you were creating at the end. To die three times the same way. Very interesting.


  • silent bee
    May 7, 2007

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    this piece is very detailed and what a crazy dream! i enjoyed this very much. thank you for entering and best of luck to you in the contest!

    ~bee


  • JoyfulWriter
    April 10, 2007

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    This is so awesome! Very powerful in every detail and certainly proven to be a most erotic read and such a hot journey...thanks for entering this in my contest...good luck! Smiles, Terry


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    April 2, 2007
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    that must have been one hell of a dream to have..but it allowed ou to write an incredily powerful write..and i enjoyed reading this..your words were very strong, powerful and emotional a wel..,,keep writitng your very talented and good luck in the contest

    ~Chrissy~


  • ur worse nightmare
    March 21, 2007

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    nicely done very imaginative i also love the imagery well done good luck and rhanks for entering
    cass xx


  • Poetic-Goddess
    March 21, 2007
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    Curving your tonuge spelling
    L-O-V-E,

    Your beautiful
    Your movements graceful
    Your like a work of poetry
    Still you come near
    Finally your here

    These lines I love
    The imagery was amazing
    Well done
    Awesome write!!!

    Thanks for entering
    And I wish you the best of luck!!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 8, 2007
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    Passion speaks and weakens us to
    be the victim of our lust....
    great write...Blue


  • ur worse nightmare
    March 2, 2007

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    brilliant i thought it was brilliant, their was heat, spice, hotness passion and darkness and murder nad imagery i absolutly loved it very well done
    all the best in the contest
    cass xx


  • Asylaarix
    November 23, 2006

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    OMFG ... so erotic ... so hot ... so sad at the end ... God do I ever understand this poem ... this write is so .... GOOD ... you did so well ... omg this has got to be the best piece I have read so far ... this is fuckin AWESOME!!!! ... right on babe ... good job ... wow ... you left me breathless and speechless ... that hardly happens lol ... god I can't wait to read more ... keep it up baby gurl ... YOUR GOOD

    Love,
    Mom


  • Scorpions Kiss
    November 22, 2006

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    Amazing write you have some very interesting dreams..
    I really liked this piece one of my favs so far
    thanks for entering

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