It’s only love, pure and unadulterated,
Perfect and twisted, pain and pleasure;
Shaped by our words, our daydreams,
And crushed, too quickly, by chance.
But one true kiss should last forever,
Held onto by this moment, this second;
Another touch made perfect by love,
Even if only for a moment in time.
Your blue eyes searched mine with want,
And lust coloured my world red and black;
Grab me closer, kiss me deeply,
Bury yourself in my body and soul.
Don’t pull away from me with shame,
It doesn’t matter, forget their looks;
Kiss me again, I’ll make you forget,
Please, it’s only love, not a sin.
Just another kiss, angel, right now,
Another moment of passion, to feel;
Leave me in bliss, not in tears,
Heal me with you kiss again.
A contest entry
- True Love And Passion by Carus.
300 points, ended December 3, 2006, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I loved this so so much! I totally know how it feels right now.
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And lust coloured my world red and black;
Just another kiss, angel, right now,
Another moment of passion, to feel;
I'm not sure if I'm in love with the way you write or just you =P
I love this so so so much; I've definitely felt like this at times. Well, not anymore, but I've been there. Way to word it
Stay sick
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Inspiring
Reading your work, leaves me in shame. My poetry can't even compare! It hardly rhymed yet, the flow was very smooth and understandable, and I was able to envision each detail of each line delectably. Beautiful! Heart-felt! Original! I'm afraid I can't find more righteous words to properly sing my praise.
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wow
that was amazing i indeed it is what i wish my ex would do if it is truly love he wouldnt of cared back to poem that was a piece written from the heart one that flowed wonderfully and was well written
These 2 lines are what all guys gay straight or bi should remember Don’t pull away from me with shame,
It doesn’t matter, forget their looks; my ex he wondered 2 much what people thought so meh bak 2 poem i really salute u for understanding that and embracin love no matter whose lookin i applaud u hope 2 read more
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All the love that can be, seems to ooze from every line in a very sophisticated way. There is so much to enjoy on every line. Congratulations on the gold, you expressed your self supremely.
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This is such a beautiful poem. Really and truly, it's soaked in beauty and passion. It expresses love, but is also rather erotic in a very understated way...the best way in my opinion. I love how you can create all of this emotion and story through description of a perfect moment...that perfect kiss. It's really one of your best I think! So, so smooth and delicate, yet emotional and vibrant and strong at the same time. This really is a wonderful poem! :-)
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This poem was effing amazing. <3 i dont read a lot of poems about gay love on here but this one was just... it was passionate, it showed true love, and yet it still emphasised the bitterness of society towards this sort of love. society's so screwed up .. they discriminate against things they fear or dont understand, just because its different. but the poem was beautiful and the picture matched; i particularly liked the second and fourth stanzas. i REALLY hope you get a trophey in this contest, because the contest is about love and this is what love is all about. <3
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flowed well... i couldnt stop reading it, very good!
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Swweeeeet
That is a quite gripping poem, and i realy liked it. Your use of vocabulary, pulled me into the poem. Very good!
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Heartwarming, and intensely erotic!
How poignant -- the photo, and the kissing...yes, it really is, more than bodies tangling with bodies, it really is the KISSING between two guys that opens the hearts so that the joining of the bodies together is so very much more meaningful...lol --Openman
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~sigh~
All too well do I recall that want for that kiss that touch just once again hoping, wishing it would come, to last a lifetime, burned forever in my mind, my heart... Very well written, with passion, longing, frustration, urgency.. yes my friend, I empathize with this feeling well.. Well done!
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This was awesome.. well described, takes the reader into the mind of a gay.. and shows them that gay love is really no different from straight love, except for who its between. Great job.
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passionate
This is a truly beautiful poem. It discribes gay love very well. It does indeed have some bit of bitterness but you cant really get it that much because this poem in based on love. This is what i think, you can dissagree if you want but this is my opinion, you think its all right about it and you dont care what people think, but the other male finds it wrong and cares about what people say about two guys kissing. I dont think there is anything wrong with two guys kissing and other people who have problems with that should just get fucked. Being gay, BI or lesbion should be nothing to be ashamed of.
Shit sorry I do talk to much.
Anyway amazing poem and well yes just very passionate.
And very very good luck in the contest. I wish you the best.
XxScreaming-AngelXx
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awesome
ahh. your officially the coolest person every in the history of people. EVER. (very prestigious, btw)
awesome job. very, um, makes me giggle...
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Breath Taking
the first kiss can make or break a relationship... it is the most important emotion, feeling that there is and every will be.(when it gets to true intimacy.)
Yvonne
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What a passionate and beautiful poem! With a hint of bitterness, it seems...seems like a true love affair that is going wrong, and yet fits beautifully. The flow is wonderful, and the freeverse with structure adds a lot to the poem. I like the title, and how you used the picture, reading into it. Wonderful work! Thank you so much for entering, and best of luck!
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