Contemplation,
Flesh all in a pallid hue.
Temerity yet filled deprecation.
who knew she was impervious to you?
In a overwhelming concept of complication,
This noblesse oblige that know one ever knew.
To her there was never an offer of reparation.
Now this Angel’s forgiveness away has flew.
Away with absolutely no justification,
No signs of her ever being blue.
Reputation modification?
I knew!
A contest entry
- biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING FREEVERSE by leslielovesthomas.
400 points, ended October 25, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me what you think!!!
Comments
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BEAUTIFUL
I love this poem!! I'm at a loss for words Thank you for entering and good luck!
Leslie -
I have
tied myself into your work now. This is a write of imagining cures. The angel's existence is really the idea of which we all have ever questioned.
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powerful
this is a very strong poem and i like the format that is is in it is very artistic -
very nice. I like the form you use here, and it is a very powerful piece. Keep up the amazing writes.
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nice, like the form, it took me a grip of time to read tho lol i had to look up the big words
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Dearest sevaS-trA321
Luckily Angels like us are created beings,
Although we were made to be higher than the Angels of Heaven,
For their forgiveness I will not seek,
As they would deny my supplication.
On this earthly plain in Jesus' arms I weep,
Though not felt His arms rock me in my sleep.
In sheer earthly agony I live...
With one hope that Jesus' life He did give...
For me!!!
The most unworthy!!!
Albeit I could not do the same,
This also is my shame.
I am but a fallen soul,
Hoping someday to Heaven I will go.
I loved your words, but disagree, Angels will never judge you or me.
FeysRealms Heart is bleeding
For my Brothers life I'm grieving.
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though the poem is revolving around the concept of angels…it isn’t really about them. To me an angel is untainted an pure… My poem is hard to explain but is for people to make what they want out of it. So you’re not wrong at what you saw in my poem but it really isn’t about angels.
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wow. i liked this one. it's short, but powerful. great write.
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zOMG it's like an orb!!!!!!
blah blah blah I'm tired. I give you points all the damn time, dont tell me "OH THERE'S SUCH GOOD WORK ON HERE I HAVE TO APPLAUD." No. THERE'S NOT. "But Lauren! You're just a bitter old bitch!" Yes, and that help me distinguish boring ass poetry from decent APPLAUD WORTHY poetry. And that's definately mine. So come on woman.
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Beautifully captured in form and language, feels cyclical while still going somewhere.
Cheers for the comment by the way
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i like how when you come out from the middle on both sided the lines counterpart rhymes. i dont think that makes sense but you know what i mean. and id dearly pay to know the name of this writing style. i think im too tired to know the meaning of the poem, but it is beautifully written and thought out! fuckin sweet.
Yawning too widely that jaw hurts
~~~ektor
ps: we need more maple syrup
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Excellent!!!!!!!!
I love this poem; it was so insightfully done I loved the message that it sends. Great Write as always!!!!!!!!
trixie
AP sister! 
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