WOULD YOU BE MY FRIEND
I don’t insist that you be my friend
I’m asking you, would you be my friend
I shall not disturb you by ringing your bell
But when you free, will take your time for a while
When you will busy I shall not say anything
But I shall try to help if I can do something
When you will be sad, I will not be mad
But I shall try reducing stress from your head
When you will happy and will tell me something
I shall really concentrate even its about anything
But you will have to also perform your due
If my eyes become wet and have some dew
When I feel alone or have any pain or grief
You will have to care of me and reduce my grief
For me you will mean a lot and more than many things
But I should be important for you with other things
Me and My heart so delicate and had so much pain
And you have to promise you will not give me pain
I feel so fear from the time of being broken
And I hope you will be a good friend for me
By A.Ghani Shahzaib aghani121@hotmail.com
The poet of hearts and beautiful words
He will be a great friend for everyone!
Friends for friends
Author notes
no and yeah i m not sending for becoming your soulmate bcz i know i m not a good choice for it
i just wanted to participate in this contest hopefully about any trophy
well thanx
i wish you will find your soulmate don't worry 
A contest entry
- round contest number one (prewrite) by serenity silvermoon.
510 points, ended September 25, 111 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
just tell me like or not?
Comments
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Such a beautifully written poem and a terrific sentiment. You have penned some beautiful words here and I wish you good luck in the contest.
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It's a great poem honestly, alot of meaning and feeling in this, but you didn't use a title out of the choices I offered, so unfortunately I am going to have to DQ you...sorry...
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I would love to be your friend. Look's like you know what it's all about.
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i love this poem, i am sure your a nice friend too.
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lovely... nicely written... some grammatical mistakes but that's ok... not quite sure about the ryhming- either use it all the time or not at all... you use it every once in awhile... but I'm sure that it makes it sound better than what I read lols... you have a good idea of what you want your friend to be and that's absolutely beautiful... good wishes for the rest of your writings!! ::Lara::
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great write. i really like it. yes i will b your friend
Keep up the good work
Beck
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Hey! This is a wonderful poem very touching and i think that anyone would be glad to have you as their friend. you are very talented and this poem did not disappoint!! Good luck in the contest
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I LOVE IT!!!!! Thats a Great Poem!
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this poem is very nice i really do like it keep up the good work.
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this poem has a a sort of beat to it
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I will be your friend
I like this it makes me want to reach out to you very cute
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Thank You for your entry into my contest but you still need to submit one more as I asked for one pre-write so that I could check out your writing style and you need to come up with a fresh write in which I would like you to ask me for my heart, my head, my mind, my soul, my love! Have fun with this and I look forward to your 2nd piece!
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Beside some grammer errors this is a very good write.You sound like you would be a very good friend to someone. So you should not have any problems finding friends.
~Snappy~
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this is a very good poem keep it up
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very beautiful poem . i find it interesting how you put it to style. a very beautiful poem good job. keep up the goo write.
Liana
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Heartfelt
A very wonderful and heartfelt write. This is what true friendship is about.. being there for each other, but also to allow each other space when they need it. we should all be so lucky to have at least one really good friend. Good luck in the contest
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Nice poem! I think it's great, other than the odd way some things are worded. It seems to clutter the poem a bit and make it confusing...for example, when it says 'But I should be important for you with other things' or 'I feel so fear from the time of being broken' these sentences could be re-worded so they fit better. Great work other than those little things!!
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"When you will busy I shall not say anything" and "When you will happy and will tell me something" along with quite a few others don;t read very well. Maybe I'm in a picky mood, but it really stops the flow of the poem, and it would be really good if this didn't happen
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Good friend indeed
you sound like a great friend, seems like you will find tons of friends if you treat them like this... nice write, keep it up.. -
A very sincere wish,and a heart warming gesture walk hand in hand in this beautiful poem. Well done. Lovely work.
Shaz xx
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hey this is a very beautiful poem, and you seem like a great poet and a great friend, anyone would be lucky to be your friend. great work.
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wow!
i really love this poem...and at this moment im my mind set, it leaves a lump in my throat....i think its a great write though!
XXX
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this is a butiful poem aghanishah im sure u will make a lovely friend you are a very nice person and you always have kind words to say ...good luck in the contest...smiles ~cheeky~
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