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What I've Done

I am the tears that pour from your eyes,
I am your fears, your hopes, and your lies,
I am forsaken, and ashamed at birth,
We've tried to find me help, but nothing seems to work,
I am the lost, the lonely frightened child,
You can't seem to handle me, you say I'm too wild,
You had hopes for me, and I had my dreams,
You gave up on me, and made my dreams leave,
I tried my best for you, did all that I could,
But you cast me away, and said I was no good,
I use to make you laugh, but now all you do is cry,
You tell me that I'm sick, and soon that I will die,
I haven't given up, and I don't plan to yet,
I'll try to cheer you up, even though you are upset,
Please forgive me for what I've done,
I'll try harder next time I swear,
I just want to have a mother, to care for me and be there,
I may have my flaws, but I won't give up faith,
Reflecting on my past, was my only mistake,
Soon I will be happy, and my mind will be fixed,
I just hope that this is real, and that its not just a trick, 

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  • CrystalJet
    February 13, 2007
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    I like it. It is really good. I can't see anything wrong with it although I don't know is you used only commas on purpose. I like it though, I think it gives the perseption that it doesn't end. Thank you for this good entry into my contest.