Millions and billions of stars are out tonight
I feel like I could count each and every one
like I could I actually keep up with the number this time
do you think I can?
Please tell me you do
tell me you believe in me
tell me I can do anything
that I CAN fly around the world
with just one bound and a bright blue cape.
Hold my hand, please
and don't let it go
never ever let it go.
Rub around each of my fingers
pick the polish off of my nails, it's ok
I don't mind
it's really quite cute to be truthful...
No matter what what went on today
I just want you to stay here with me,
lie here in the bed of your truck
hold me close, wrap me up tight in your arms
and my pyschedelic blanket
as we talk amongst ourself
and try to count the stars.
Author notes
Started off as a freewrite, then I touched it up some. Still a bit raw, but I like pieces of it. =)
Please tell me what you think. :]
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wow, this is wonderful.
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i love this so much. not just saying that. it portrays something so beautiful, something ive always wanted to experience. and you portrayed it well. great job!
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! wow.
it's raw in an absolutely adorable and stunning way.
I love love LOVE it.
it paints a beautiful picture and still has some underlying not so in-your-face meaning to it.
it's wonderful, really.
I loved how I could kind of hear the desparation of wanting to be believed in regardless of how much sense it made.
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OMG thank you so much.
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AWWWWWW damn, this is sweet!!! *stares in envy for your darn talent* hehe
Ty
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and just so you know, you're very talented too!
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Aww haha thanks I'm just a beginner so....I'm here to get hardcore critiques!! RAWR! hahaha
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Aw, thank you. =)
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This is so adorable.Iloveit!
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Thanks!
♥ YOUR Madison Ann
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Lol, i thought, on the first read through, that you'd written 'LICK the polish off my nails'. I was like... o.O bizarre? Hehe. But now I see its pick, and thats kinda cute. I like this, it sounds like its just lovely warm thoughts from the top of your head blended into a poem. Makes me feel fuzzy
excellente ^.^ x x x x x x x
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Mwhaha Lick off polish, that IS a bit odd.
Makes you feel fuzzy, aww. Too bad things aren't like this between us really anymore, but that's okay. Boys will come and go. I'm back to my harem I guess haha.
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aw, this is cute. I can't think of a better word. Very very cute.
'pick the polish off of my nails, it's ok
I don't mind
it's really quite cute to be truthful...'
'with just one bound and a bright blue cape.'
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. Just cuteness.
and I love the way you tie the 'count the stars' back into the end.
Good good good!
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♥ Thank you m'lovely.
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