Wipe away these hot tears from my burning cheeks,
Quiet this aching of my soul.
My beloved, your are not true,
And in the still, I wait for you.
Take back your half-hearted love,
It pains me to see an affection so fouly used.
A contest entry
- Heart Broken by SensualWhispers.
425 points, ended March 6, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show, Don't Tell! by loveisthemoment.
330 points, ended April 11, 2007, 17 entries
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Comments
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I love it. Good luck!
Love always,
~GC -
Very nice...
.. I can relate to this. You think someone is real and they end up being totally fake. And what's worse is you end up used. I know the feeling alllll to well. thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
Great piece of truthful writing here
Crocodile tears. That is what this piece say's to me. Half-hearted love and being 'not true' again, all part of a false love that was probably never meant to be.
the way some people use affection like that, for their own gain, is hurtful to see - especially for the person on the receiving end. This is a great piece which is truthful in it's honesty. Well done for this.
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Oh my goodness! It's so beautiful. I loved it. Every word. It's a wonderful write. Written with such raw emotion. You took a feeling that's so hard to describe, and you did it! You put it into words. I loved it. Please! Write more! ~Perfectly Ruined~
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