This is more than I felt for love
I wish I could tell how I felt for you
Cause this secret is eating me
Lounging around
Only thinking of your face
I'm always with my friends
But one day, we will be alone
You're here with me
As I fix my wing
It's so simple for me to see you
But I can't tell you
How much I love and admire you
One day I'll build up my courage
I'll always take a hit to save you
I'll always be here cause you're all that I got
How much I love and admire you
One day I'll build up my courage
I'll always take a hit to save you
I'll always be here cause you're all that I got
You're more beautiful than the brightest star
If you're scared then please know this
I'll be there to hold your hand through it
It's really kinda funny
How I just can not tell you
How I enjoy your company
And how I wish to spend years with you
You're here with me
As I fix my wing
It's so simple for me to see you
But I can't tell you
How much I love and admire you
One day I'll build up my courage
I'll always take a hit to save you
I'll always be here cause you're all that I got
How much I love and admire you
One day I'll build up my courage
I'll always take a hit to save you
I'll always be here cause you're all that I got
A contest entry
- The Anything You Want Contest (Prewrites Allowed) by KittieLyyn.
350 points, ended April 1, 2007, 96 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wear your heart on your sleeve!!! ♥ by Weetzie bat.
550 points, ended April 26, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It;s A Love Type Of Thing by paintitblack1001.
300 points, ended June 12, 2007, 42 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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This is a beautiful write. I kept thinking of the movie City of Angels for some reason as I was reading this piece. It is completely stunning! Wow! Thanks for sharing.
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Omg, this poem...is really funny, I'm sorry, but you have such a wit and dryness about you, yet, you can also be goofy, but you hide the meaning so deep, this was really enjoyable...
On one level, it was a pretty normal love poem, with some great lines, mostly the take a hit part, but that was also what cracked me up...Dr. Cube, you are devilishly twisted but utterly delightful...and your poetry...it's adorable and meaningful...you're like an onion...layers....
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Yea it was kind of a corny write. This is one of my earliest writes when I was just starting out.
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Well, you reviewed my early stuff, so I might as well return the favor...
It was good, a lot better then you give yourself credit for...
(plus a lot of girls are just swooning in the comments below, oh my)
~Hippie
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i loved it so much
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awwwww! this is so cute. i'm in that type of situation where i can't tell my boyfriend that i love him and how i really feel about him. This is so cute! Good luck in the contest!
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You're more beautiful than the brightest star
this is my favourite line, and I love the repetition, but I don't feel that it flows as great as it could...I did enjoy reading it though.
Good luck and Thanxx for entering my contest -
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arigato, Zekule! *huggles* I really wuvs it -
This one's sweet too! It kind of mirrors how I feel for someone right now. Awesome job once again.
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